by darktwin
Though a little overly wrought. Try to refrain from telling us what the character's are thinking or feeling and instead, let the reader draw their own conclusions by what the character does. Sometimes, less is more. I liked the premise and the X's and O's were told fairly well, though I suggest using more pronouns instead of constantly saying Alex did this or Alex did that. We get the idea. All in all, a nice effort.
i agree keep up the great story lines. That was a great read.
I loved this story. I agree with the previous comments there aren't nearly enough father son stories and I hope you'll continue to write more. I really loved the concept & the detail you went into. It was absolutely fantastic.
Thanks for posting this dad/son tale, very exciting and tender too. There are far too few father/son stories here, hope you'll post many more.
Great story line. I hope the will be another chapter, I like to read about father/son entries. Keep up the great work!
I enjoyed it greatly. I wonder how many other gay father-son (re)union stories there might be.