All Comments on 'Fairy Tale Life Ch. 01'

I enjoyed it as much as the husband did. Well written. Look forward to next chapter

Your use of imagry is outstanding. I felt as if I were in the bed with them. Of course that would be a whole other story! Keep writing. You've got the talent!

Adorable story! would we all have such loving husbands! and makes a change for the usual first time stories about young women! adorable

Great writings. I notice this is Ch. 01, I hope you find time and energy to write the following chapters. Your mind and way with words warrant it.

Thank again,

lb

I'm gonna give it a five . . . it was great, with the ideas, telling, etc. The only problem I came across is that you switch from past to present just after the oral section. It's a bit . . . not disconcerting . . . jarring, that's the word I'm looking for. Otherwise, great story! :)