All Comments on 'Fairy Tale Life Ch. 01'

I'm gonna give it a five . . . it was great, with the ideas, telling, etc. The only problem I came across is that you switch from past to present just after the oral section. It's a bit . . . not disconcerting . . . jarring, that's the word I'm looking for. Otherwise, great story! :)

Great writings. I notice this is Ch. 01, I hope you find time and energy to write the following chapters. Your mind and way with words warrant it.

Thank again,

lb

Adorable story! would we all have such loving husbands! and makes a change for the usual first time stories about young women! adorable

Your use of imagry is outstanding. I felt as if I were in the bed with them. Of course that would be a whole other story! Keep writing. You've got the talent!

I enjoyed it as much as the husband did. Well written. Look forward to next chapter