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All Comments on 'Family Isn't Blood - Fred's Life Ch. 04'

by wieliczka

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AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Sorry but i threw up.

Pretty hard going and not romantic try foolish

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
It was too obvious, and maybe insulting?

As soon as Kaja appeared "3-way" popped into my head. I'm sure it did for most readers. The only clueless person here is Fred. Do you really see him as so dense? I suspect you are trying to create drama and suspense, but you just make this guy appear like some dumb schmuck. Not your best chapter. Might have been better to just have Kaja appear in their bedroom, with Fred prepped for a surprise 3-way, then, after the sex, have Kaja's reappearance explained. The 3-way was a forgone conclusion, so it was clumsy trying to make that happen as a surprise.

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I am married to my first (and only ) wife of 38 years. Only in my extended family, (two continents) has there ever been unfaithfulness. There has been divorces, remarriage, trials and tribulations. Life is messy, I look toward building bridges, not tearing them down. In th...