All Comments on 'Farewell to the Dancing Man'

A good beginning to a story about a marriage on the edge of a cliff. There were quite a few errors, but nothing that took away from the story line. You broke the story at just the right point and now we have to wait to see what develops from the wife's stupidity and her daughters discovery. I suppose the detective, Brownlow, is the most developed character, but not a very nice person. Frankly, none of the characters are particularly likeable at this point, but perhaps some socially redeeming values will raise up from the muck as the story develops. On reflection, my comments seem pretty negative, but I am reacting to your depiction of the natural beauty of the scene you described and the nice house in contrast with all who live within the house.

it is DEFINITELY your early work!!!

or a MOMMY DEAREST review. TK U MLJ LV NV

Nothing like someone screwing around because her husband is exhausted from his work. The partnership should be dissolved but there are two kids in the mix. What to do? Or better yet, what will the daughter do? Perhaps she will want the play toy for herself? Do you think that the Detective Sargent checked out the crime site?

And the dead man? This seems to be a JPB specialty piece!

We thank CMGM for digging out this one.

She has earned it - will she suffer through it or win for being unfaithful?? Explanations are not excuses.

Cmm, I like the style of this story. I would have guessed that you had rewritten it to your present level of skill.

However, I can't say that I'm up on the design of septic tanks. The question I have how did an adult body get in there?

Plus, I thought that septic tanks have to be pumped out every year or two. Especially in areas prone to flooding? How did the skeleton stay intact through that turbulence?

This is the second story by this author I have started to read and by the end of the first page I just gave up on it.

the best is yet to come. TK U MLJ LV NV

You can't just stop this story where it is!