by WFEATHER
Too short, and that was no ending.
It was good but way way too short.
Nice but you ended it too fast ant too out of place. like trying to finish quickly, add a better ending and it'll turn out great.
....like the change????-pistolpackinpete
good, and pretty hot, but fucking WEIRD at the end
Good story. You don't get paid to write so it's long enough tell these vultures to fuck off.
Would love to read more.