All Comments on 'Finding an Editor Ch. 01'

i could read this type of story all day long...regardless of the shi er a people out there that will find something wrong with it

really enjoyed the story loved the humour well done 5 stars from me

James UK

Absolutely brilliant

Loved it and as always, so, so very well written. Thanks for the pleasure and privilege.

Fuck you need an editor. Its starts out with 'Bob' he punched, then towards the end the guys name was 'Tom', same with 'Mariam'/'Miriam', they kept changing. That's just a few of the myriad of mistakes, take some pride in your writing! 2*

Pretty powerful writing. I love the bonds you've created between Bonnie and her friends. I hope you continue with Benny & Bonnie and the gang. Otherwise, the ending was too abrupt. Miriam's character seems to be only two dimensional. I don't know if it's because you didn't round out her character enough or if it's just my aversion to that personality type. Anyway, I pretty much enjoy everywhere your stories take me. So, open the gate. I'm sure I'll enjoy the ride. Thank you

I truly enjoy the way you carry a story and build out the characters.

Keep it up. I always look for your work. That is the best compliment I can give.

Your title says CH. 01 meaning there's probably a CH. 02 somewhere. You do not put "To be continued" at the end, meaning that there's probably not a CH. 02 somewhere. Be a little more careful next time.

Look forward to the rest.

It's good to have you back, you've been missed. This is a wonderful story and I hope that you will continue it!

Very entertaining. A wonderful love story.

A lot better than the Mike Hogue crap.

AMerryMan

Congratualations on an excellent story, you have it all, humour, love and an excellent plot. Yes it could have used a little editing, especially on names, like Miriam, and Mariam, Bob and Bob, but those were minor compared to the rest of the story. Thanks for a really good read, certainly one of the best on Lit in the last year.

Can't wait to read the rest of this wonderful tale

Love it!!!!

I should learn not to read unfinished books. it is so frustrating to wait. Any specific incentive to finish this one?

I enjoyed reading your story.

Thank you.

As ever outstanding, I hope you had a great summer, I, for one missed you!!

I have to be honest with you. You are a great writer, lots of humor and down to earth people, but you ruined this one for me. It is your story and your likes and dislikes will be in it, but when you shaved off all the pubic hair on fifty year old women, I lost interest in the rest of the story. For cryin our loud, stand them on their head and you have Stepford wives, cause they all look alike and it ain't necessarily good. A little hair, or a lot leaves a bit of mystery and some tacos need some mystery.

I gave you four stars because you are a good writer, not that I liked the story.

This one is a keeper!

Thank you for actually writing something about loving wives. I have a few favorites and we all have our reasons for them. If you get voted less than "4" on this just be aware that someone disagrees with the premise, not the writing. You had my interest piqued before (have your editor look that one up--it's the single glaring error in syntax or usage), but this one totally enthralled me. I can't wait to see where the plot line finalizes.

In case you didn't figure it out from the stunningly subtle clues, you gained a fan.

Brendan

Awesome writing and I'm off to read pt 2 :-)

all have and ending enjoyable to some, TK U MLJ LV NV

six stars!

An excellent story....Thank you

we all missed you when you were gone....love all your work and this one rates with the best...thanks for writing again....keep up the great work..

Thank you...yes we missed you!

Simply stunning.

C

You had me in years when he proposed and the scene at the spa had me in stitches. 5 stars!!!!

This one was magic for its intense use of a passionate relationship developing for two people scarred by their first marriages.

Each had reasons for their particular pain, and the other had the ointment that soothed them and secured them forever.

I particularly enjoy your writing, as your sense of justice is well executed in nearly every story.

Please, don't ever change!

And it's nice to read your work again.

Welcome back,qhml1.

I'm already awaiting ch.2!

caramel turd is back

And yet another great read.

The foray of center works because it worked for them not just him or her - the details were unimportant to us - the book needed what she knew and that is what he asked for right up front so she is still "working for him" he may or may not have done it that way but he WAS already publishing and so it was no stretch to think he wanted this published too -

So my only questions are around what happens now most of the story has been told - one would think -

He gets rave reviews make a mint - they make a movie and ibid he gets filthy rich - buys Tom's bank fires Tom and laughs at his ex - or maybe not LOL.

To CastleStone, if I were to guess...

I think that of CSs' style the food focus and playfulness were the best parts - food, since sex is kinda overdone, and food is more universal. Food, to bring sensation to text would be something Jung would approve of. Playfulness needs no explanation. The playfulness slipped a bit, the B/D section may have saved it but I think rather moved things out of the common center too far, and empathy was lost.

Oddly, when I wrote CS to take him gently to task for some aesthetic issues, I found him to be a very nice guy. RIP. You, I'd say something about fingernail styles to... but what do I know?

Just my take on things, on to chapter 2.

Green-something

Please don't let success mess them up!

I'm really worried because Ch 2 is in "Loving Wives", and that usually doesn't bode well for marriages.

Here's hoping my concern is misplaced!

Very entertaining read. Thanks for sharing.

Overall, I really liked this story. I liked how the various "ex's" were treated and the "heros" were vindicated. What I didn't care for was the BDSM part. Each to his own.

Good work. Please continue the story.

Cant get enough of your stories. Wright more...more...MORE

I have been reading many of your stories, commenting an the ones I liked best. This is a new most favoritest! Thank you Mike

Bonnie said she STOPPED “pruning her bush”. That means she used to trim, so why does she need help now?

“A little mystery keeps their interest peaked." – Interest isn’t “peaked”, it’s “piqued”. This was repeated with the publisher, Beth.

“enjoying his moans and his hand on the top of his head.” – Don’t you mean “my” head?

“Both her husbands had left her after discovering she couldn't bear children, even though she told her second husband up front.” – No, only the FIRST husband left AFTER discovering she couldn’t have children, the second was told up front.

Is Benny’s ex’s name “Miriam” or “Mariam”, both were used on the same page!

“she didn't have to go if she didn't have to.” – If she didn’t WANT to!

I don’t think Bonnie TRIES to needle Miriam, she does a good enough job on her own, and the grandkids don’t need any prompting to know who the more loving Nana is!

“I waited until Thursday night to tell Hilda and Bonnie” – Hilda and SARAH!

“We had made arraignments” – You mean “arrangements”, unless you’re planning on a trial!

I agree with the hope that ch 2 being in "Loving Wives" isn't a bad omen!

I ran into you by accident. I can not add to what I said for your other stories. As my grandchildren would say. "YOU ROCK"

Loved most of it but you let his bitch and the banker get off too fucking easy. They needed a crushing catastrophe to bring them down to trap them where they left Dennis and Bonnie... but broken, friendless and destitute with no one to turn to... which soon has her turn on him because she now sees the fame and fortune that she would have be part of. (If only the cheating, conniving cunt had kept her legs together for a while longer.)

The master controlling his fuck slave segment reminded me of my sister and me, starting when I was thirteen and she was eleven. We lived in the country and were left at home alone most of the time. I lassoed her with my cowboy rope and hogtied her. While she was squirming around, trying to get loose, her legs were open and her loose panties had slid off her pussy. I remembered guys in school talking about using Vaseline so I made her come inside and pushed her onto my bed while I got the Vaseline. I pulled her panties off and rubbed Vaseline on her pussy. When I got undressed and rubbed in on my cock, she started yelling and trying to get loose but I got between her legs and the more she bucked to get loose, the deeper the head of my cock went into her opening until I had it all the way inside of her. After I broke her cherry, I just held still for a while and tried to get her to quiet down, while slowly sliding in and out of her. I could feel her pussy muscles grabbing at me, trying to stop me from moving but the Vaseline let me keep sliding in and out of her. After a few minutes, she stopped fighting and I started fucking her until I came inside of her. When I was finished, I told her that I was going to fuck her anytime I wanted to and she was going to let me. I promised her that if she did it good, I'd get her some candy when I was at the store. (we NEVER had candy so that was my ticket to keep fucking her) She soon started enjoying it and has been my willing fuck partner/slave for the last nineteen years. Nobody ever knew and nobody else ever fucked her, while we grew up, because I would know and I eventually learned that it was because she didn't and still doesn't want anyone else inside of her. I felt the same way. We moved 360 miles to the other end of the state after she graduated, so no one knows us or that we're sister and brother.

I've never fucked another woman because I don't want her to fuck another man.

Comment at end.

Ed Grocott

edgrocott@gmail.com

and can that be released as goodness. TK U MLJ LV NV

Always enjoy your work Q! Thanks for writing.

Fun characters, interesting themes and heartwarming finish. Keep up the great work - I want to read more!!

So far MrQ looking forward to the next chapter--the ex needs a bit of shite sent her way seems only fair lol

Just "Wow!"

I must admit the title scared me. I was afraid it was going to be either a How To or an attempt at the humour category. Pleasantly surprised.

Off to read Ch. 02 and see where this is going. There are so many different possibilities.

...in Technicolor, with Dolby 7.1 surround sound.

Please, don't ever stop!

OK, several more errors than what makes for smooth, perfect reading marred the experience slightly, but only just enough for me to remind you that work this good deserves a perfect delivery.

Good editorial help would help keep the pace. You obviously know how it all works, so I'll trust that you'll take this as what it is....advice, and worth every penny!

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Cheers and Thank you!

BDSM is not your thing! After page 5 I could not read any more....You are such a good writer you don't need to go there. A little cheating.....a little revenge....and a few reconciliations is what you are best at....Romance baby....Romance.

So refreshing to read a story of people a bit older than usual. Yes, they still have life and love at that age. I see another group of readers reading your tales now. It certainly appeared to be written from your heart. Well Done. BK

loved this tale. I personally, could have done without the graphic sexual side; the story is good enough to stand on its own and the readers who enjoyed the BDSM probably would not appreciate the pure story telling

I'll admit that I was a little leary at first. The title doesn't give you any idea of the depth of the story. But there is sooo much depth that I couldn't stop reading once I started.

The character build ups along with the actual story line makes this the best story that I have read on this site in the 2 years that I've been reading stories hear !!! And this story is better than most of the store-bought books that I've purchased in the last few years.

If I could have given this story a rating greater than a "5" I would give it a "10" !!!!!

I do have 2 "cons". First, I'd like to know how things turned out after Bonnie took his manuscript to her friend in New York. And secondly, there are a few places in the story where a proof-reager needed to be used. The errors weren't something that ruined the story but they did detract from the story in places.

Other than what I stated as "cons", in my humble opinion this is the best and most realistic story on a site filled with stories.

My wife asked me to put Garcia and Griman's "Arabia" on speaker while I was reading your story. Synchronistic - almost? Comparable in stature to "Rhapsody In Blue" maybe. Toss up between "Ripple" and "Touch of Gray" for my favorite, but I love the jams too. I've read some of your other stuff but just decided to re-read through all of it by date posted. You're a great story teller and not a bad wordsmith.

Please keep it coming.

Your "Lake" story brought me Happy Tears...three times.

This one too...Once.

Maybe it's because I'm older, but I really love

how "savvy" your writing is!

Of the bdsm only 4 stars

Haven't read the later 2 chapters yet (or the 1st 50 comments here), but in this chapter Benny is supposed to be a gentle sweet man (except of course when he's riled). Yet EVERY time they have sex he pretty much pounds her into submission. Never do they "make love" or "tender sweet love". What's with that?

Perhaps it will change in the following 2 chapters.

I really like this story, the character development and plot. It is mainly and easy read with an undercurrent of humour [I'm a Brit] that lightens the story, and it flows really well. The pacing and timeline are good, and only once did I have to re-read for dialogue flow.

I noticed more typo's than your usual, especially once about halfway through, and again towards the end. I understand, I am a published novelist myself. You also used the word 'arraignments' which jarred greatly. The word you need is 'arrangements'. However, I'm not complaining as this is well written, and typo's happen. I would suggest that you consider using me as a beta reader, but that's up to you.

Regardless, keep up the great work. You are one of the best writers on here and I always look forward to reading and enjoying your stories. Great writing!

Could this be a REAL LOVING Wife story! I really enjoyed how they ended up together (and the ex having her buyer's remorse). I'm not really into the BDSM thing but you seemed to make it work with her Plum identity and I could still feel the love between them. I also liked her girl friends...how original that they were not cheaters - but actually loved their significant others.

My hope for the next 2 parts is that success does not change them and spoil what they have. Well here I go to read Part2...wish me luck.

Thanks for a wonderful start to this very entertaining and enjoyable story.

A truly great story, and I look forward to reading the other chapters.

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This is getting interesting, I am enjoying all the was this story can go,.

5 stars

Awesome and a deadhead too!

Fantastic characters. Very believable. 5

I finished this [too] long story and was about to vote - 2 stars. BUT, 4 stars had already been checked. WTF? I've noticed this with many of your stories. I've never read them before, but my 'vote' had already been checked, most of them 4 stars, when I'd have voted differently.

That being said, I didn't like this very much. "Bonnie" is a despicable character. She's a bully, she's cruel, she's dishonest, she cannot be trusted, as was spelled out on the last two pages.

I started reading your stories in chronological order, but this is the last of your work I'll read. Sorry.

Definitely one of my favourites. Should be a series

Great story sir!!! Faithfulness is a wonderful thing...

Love it! It has your special combination of eroticism and gentle humor, both of which combine to make it believable.

Thanks for sharing your talents

Pretty awesome, I'm not into the BDSM, that's why I gave it a four, but other than that really good.

Your stories are always enjoyed but after the third read I could use something new (hint, hint). thank you once more for the read. Racfguy is nearly as stupid as my best friend's husband. It proves that god watches over imbeciles, there is no way they could survive otherwise. How could one get the names right and the story ball wrong?

Odd typo but apart from that excellent. Well written and a great read.

5 stars.

Excellent read... looking forward to read further. Thanks

Don't like the way this is heading.

Some seem to confuse BDSM with sexual play - there is a difference. BDSM is more a lifestyle usually involving pain while so far anyway; this is more play to keep a sex life fresh. The soreness she seemed to experience was more from vigorous sex than from striking her. The most sensual area of the body is the mind. The notes and package delivery fed her imagination in anticipation of what will come. I'd hate to see someone misunderstand and miss a good story!

Thank you Q, its interesting to see how your mind works!

somewhere east of Omaha

whaatever///

you had a FIVE until page 6 when you got into the BDSM, and now all you get is a TWO.

I normally don't read chain stories. I am glad I changed my thinking.

As a Romance story this started off as a real winner and then it started to slide into a fetish area. The use of BDSM as a tickler side story seemed strained to me. Although most of the writing was "professional" there were enough typos that correct spell couldn't catch to divert the story flow. The word he instead of she a missing word in the thought line. It's old fashioned but a separate proof reader would probably catch them; get someone who is willing to read what is there and not what they expect. So now....on to the next chapter of Benny's adventure.

QHML1 writes stories that grab my attention but he must get bored towards th ending and write 1 more paragraph followed by "the end". From a 5 to a 4.

Mike the Irishman 🍀

This story started off on an interesting byway, drove into a winding road, then went right over a cliff.

Loved it! Laughed for three minutes over the haircut scene.

Really enjoyable story. Not entirely sure why it's in LW though. Sure, Benny and Bonnie were both cheated on and Bennie's ex makes a couple of cameos on this chapter but, still doesn't put it into LW in my opinion.

This seems more like an enjoyable Romance story than anything

Actually rereading. Generally love it but the introduction of Plum actually detracts (significantly) from the story.

Good start. I wonder why Bonnie, a school teacher-former copy editor has not read the story and removed the errors? Let's see what the other parts contain.

5*

BJ

Rereading - I'd give it a 5 except for the introduction of Plum. Not only does it interrupt the story line but it doesn't fit. I find myself skipping completely over her parts.

Great story the ending sucked

A 5 except for Plum and the ending.

Rereading this - I would have given it a five but the introduction of Plum was a huge mistake. If I was only rating that section of the story I'd have given it a two, maybe a 2.5, but definitely no more.

Like others - a five if Plum hadn't been introduced. As a result a 3. And that's being generous.

I really really hate when I put the time in to read a story and the author just effing ends it in the middle of a scene.

Was a 4/5 - gave it a 2* because of the ending. And I didn't like Plum either.

Good grief, ain’t there some haters in the comments section?

5⭐️ and fwiw I loved the “Plum” part, I’m not a Dom or a Sub, but I do recognise some people get their kicks that way. Fwiw I happen to be of the opinion that all organised religion is a giant con trick, however I don’t downvote or make troll comments because a church/mosque etc is in a story just because I don’t like it. Live & let live people. Comment on the quality of the story, offer constructive criticism if you have it - or actually understand what it is.

Narrow minds ought not to be reading erotic stories…Regards, Ppfzz.

I gave it 5* as I really enjoyed most of it, not a big fan of the Plum segment and, to me, it felt unfinished, maybe it deserves a second part?

Ooops, sorry, I missed the other 2 parts which were in a different category.

Rereading - love the story except for Plum - she isn't just an "obstruction" to the flow of the story she's downright detrimental. It would be much better if she had never been introduced.

Je déteste Plume. Pour le reste, impeccable.

There was nothing wrong with Plum. I would have no hesitation in doing exactly the same if any significant other asked me to. Why would one not? A great story, if you have not had your blockbuster yet, I hope you do so soon.

This may just be the best I've read on here. It's stunning and should be expanded to a novel and published. Re previous comments in my opinion Plum is as essential as her left arm. BardnotBard

As usual

This is a great story. I enjoyed it a lot. I hope you expand on it. I think it still has a lot to give. Congrats!

I have just finished Finding an Editor Ch 01 - an amazing well written and absorbing story that you just don't want to put down. I am excited to continue reading the next chapters and want to thank you Q for all of the time and effort you put into your writing. Congratulations from me on yet another excellent piece.

I've loved this , my third time reading. Thank you Q! 5 stars!

somewhere east of Omaha