All Comments on 'Flatmates Ch. 01'

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peggytwittypeggytwittyover 16 years ago
Good fun for first time submitter

It gave me a laugh at this cute plot. Boy, I wonder what she does to share a drink or food.<P>Nice first submission keep them coming or cuming.<P>PT

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
good start very interesting

I like the concept. If you could explain more about her body and what she looks like. It would be a great series to continue, with them sleeping together and hanging out naked or not and some casual quickies and some long dwawn out fucks. If she could wear thongs and g-strings instead of "panties" that would be hotter. Maybe some that are of them having sex on the balcony or while cooking or something. Any way keep it up :)

AnonymousAnonymousabout 3 years ago

Interesting premise.

But it moves along too fast. Needs to slow down. Needs more dialog as they make the trip from kissing to fucking.

She saw him eying her tits and offered them to him. But no comments from him bout how she liked what he was doing to them? Or what she'd want him to do to/with them?

(And you didn'r mean LENT, you meant LEANED. And PREREQUISITE is one word.)

And no cock play? And did she like how it looked? How hard it was? Not a bit of oral -- either way?

Could have been a real winner.

Four stars.

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