by Sam3323
It doesn;t follow, no one man or woman would put up with the cheating without say something, he would have punched his friend and kicked his wife out.
I know this is fiction and this was erotic. But no man or women would let this happen and just watch there wife and Hubby cheat on them
Incomprehensible except as "How to write a bad pron script"
A really good author can take an almost impossible-to-imagine plot line, filled with implausible dialogue and turn it into something that might usefully stimulate a reader's imagination. Clearly, you're not us to that level of skill. All you've done is create a main character who seems stupid in the extreme, with no redeeming virtues and no capability of thought . . . "didn't know what to do?" Really?
While I was pleased to see 2 parts to the story, I was hoping both Pete and his business partner would of made her married pussy a part of their business.