by Sam3323
While I was pleased to see 2 parts to the story, I was hoping both Pete and his business partner would of made her married pussy a part of their business.
A really good author can take an almost impossible-to-imagine plot line, filled with implausible dialogue and turn it into something that might usefully stimulate a reader's imagination. Clearly, you're not us to that level of skill. All you've done is create a main character who seems stupid in the extreme, with no redeeming virtues and no capability of thought . . . "didn't know what to do?" Really?
Incomprehensible except as "How to write a bad pron script"
I know this is fiction and this was erotic. But no man or women would let this happen and just watch there wife and Hubby cheat on them
It doesn;t follow, no one man or woman would put up with the cheating without say something, he would have punched his friend and kicked his wife out.