All Comments on 'Forever and Ever'

Love the story one of the best on here thanks for writing it

tbh

the title is slightly misleading

Your the best Xarth!

I liked the story, but the guy was a bit of a simp.

I loved this so much. God, you always write the best love stories.

I’ve read a lot of your stories recently and realized something that bugs me is how you never describe how the characters look at all

Whew...A long, excruciatingly long story. A love story & incredibly scripted. You teased us with the inevitable knowing he would get the ultimate prize.

What a tease Anna was....

5 stars & I don't rate many stories this high. Well done!

Bill S. is reading an incest love story, and gets riled up about the fact that a bachelor - who admits he's no good without his mom (or little sister) cooking for him - only has ready-made pancake mix...

When you're in love (even if you don't realise it yet), anything your partner makes will taste better than anything from a 5 star restaurant...

But I WOULD have liked to know how they move forward. Is little sister moving in with her big bro? How are the parents going to react? Will there be little Annas and Ryans?

Pancakes with mix & water??? WTF is that abou? Sounds like a “complete” mix rife with lots of rice flour making it taste like a cheap cake mix. Ughhh!

Pancakes are only decent with a regular mix & added eggs, melted butter and milk. Grilled in more butter and added real maple syrup

The story was good except for the sucky pancakes.

Bill S.

More than good. It's memorable

I think Xarth is the best writer on this site. This story exemplifies some of his skills, especially pacing and credible dialogue.

I liked the story a great deal. The only problem was my own issue - I can't stand gamers (people who play games or manipulate others to get what they want, or for whatever reason). But I understand what you were doing, and it was very well done - how you had her cold exterior break down bit by bit and how her all-too-male brother, (i.e., "duh") took a while but figured out what was happening soon enough not to fuck it up (as he would have, had he stayed in that game/no game mode). Ultimately, they both broke down and became romantic and fell in love. I'm sure there are readers here who hate that, but fuck 'em. I suppose with age I've become an old romantic, but I appreciate kind, gentle, progression of two good people falling in love with one another. And whether it is realistic, whether - as with many of these stories - they will or will not stay together as man and wife in some town where they're not known, or whatever else might or might not happen, none of that matters. All that matters in your story is what happens between these two lovely young people in the time context you present. And for the moment, it absolutely feels - to them, as I would interpret it - like it will be forever and ever. That unconditional love is the richest kind. So thanks. I love happy endings, and I loved this one. And you are such a good writer that I grew fond of your characters. Seriously. So I'm not too good with compliments, so I'll stop here and hope you understand what I'm try to say - mostly that you truly are a very good writer, and that means quite a lot.

Reread. Still just as good. Fine writing loved the build up and growing love between the two. The brother never had a chance

A beautifully executed incestuous erotic story, a nice gentle slow burn. A sequel would be extremely interesting dealing with the parents and their combined futures, also how the relationship panned out.

Congratulations on a beautifully crafted story and excellent proofreading and editing. Thank you for this work here.

Great stuff!

Loved it, please make a sequel I would love to read more!

It was a really good slowburn story. I enjoyed both the sex and the romance. I love reading when girls don't trade their virginity for nothing, preferring it to a serious relationship and commitment.

That was an incredible build up to your story and such a delightful surprise. Forever and Ever, that would make any brother stop and think.

This is a beautifully written story with wonderfully fleshed out characters, believable conversations and reactions, and wonderful descriptions of intimacy. One of the better stories I've read on this site. I'm completely jealous I didn't write it.

Nope, don't like this couple. And although her intentions and consent become obvious in the end, much of this story reads like being in the head of a stalker/rapist. The guy always just assumes what his sister really wants, despite the signs she is giving him. All in all he is extremely self centered, He takes it for granted that other people do things for him, yet always demands payment for favours that he does. He also doesn't take interest in anything, really like a spoiled, entitled kid. Like having eaten pancakes made by his mother for decades and still not being able to make some for himself. I learned that when I was about ten and we did not use something prefabricated. He also isn"t interested in the least when his sister returns from visiting a friend, being upset and starting to tell the reason. If I want to read about assholes, I just devour the news about politics.

Nice slow burn!!

one off your best stories imho wish i could give it more than 5*

XLNT , great writing ,, wish it were a little longer with the future

(2/14/2022) A very enjoyable read, very romantic. I agree with BobbyMike below. Five stars.

I thought a Sensual and Delicate subject, was handled intricately and excitingly...Thanks!

I have read three of your stories and am now officially your fan so keep at it.

Ah come on, really, this is how it ends? I love it, just wanted much more.

I don't think this one needs a part two at all.... I know we didn't get to see Anna be direct with her words about what she did and why she did it..... But we really do know. And while what drama may come from the circumstances isn't spelled out, that's never really a very interesting part of the story to me, anyway.

This type of scenario is incredibly hot. But not just casually hot..... But serious (sibling kink) soulmate hot..... And there's something amazing about the girl begging the one that totally goes after what she wants.... Instead of being the one pursued.. the soulmate level romance nice with the sibling kink.... And l with her knowing him so well and carefully hitting so the right buttons to make him realize that she's the one.... So very juicy. No need to answer every question in this one. The important bases are already covered

Though it's usually fun in your similar themed stories to have the vulnerable admissions of the sister having pinned after him for so long.... And spelling it out, it was totally made clear with her not totally breathing the context of her "game" that eye was going after the one she knew she was completely in love with..... And for keeps. Obviously fine very consciously and masterfully.... Well done.

Perfect

Yet another great story from a great author

5 Stars

the only thing that could have made this better was if she would have repeated back......FOREVER AND EVER.

another great story.

I wish this had been my experience with my brother, we eventually made love and continue to live as a couplbhb

Maybe I'm too literal or too unsophisticated literature-wise...but I like to like, or respect the characters.

Her attitude is annoying...she's acting like a stereotypical teenage...acting up, being immature, lying, stealing (not paying back what she borrows, not giving all the money to her brother her father have to her to give him...and that's before the larger serious shoplifting issue).

Her brother seems a bit better, but still a bit of a slacker.

At any rate, they end up playing with sex when I'm not sure either are up to the responsibilities (birth control), or consequences of the act.

While very well writen, I'm just not sure they are nice (or intelligent) people.

I can't help but compare them to similar couples in the brother-sister stories by 8letters or Mused (Worth it, Worth it Still). Those couples seem a bit more mature and you get the sense they KNOW what they are getting themselves into.

awww cmon....I agree with the others. You need to write another chapter. You did this with He's Mine. Just dropped it. I found you on Smashwords only I am a little hesitant to get a book thinking I'll just be left hanging or you'll just leave it incomplete. YOU are such a good writer.

Please!?

Great story, but it should continue. What happens next, come on Xarth you can't leave your readers hanging. To this point 5 stars

I hope you continue with this story. You Sir/Mam are an erotic wordsmith .

Second time around, And, I like this story more and more, Xarth you have done a great job here, l really like her, she is the sort of strange I have always liked. My wife is a bit like her, a bit bossy and a bit submissive when it counts. Another chapter showing their developing relationship would be great....Please????!!!!

I gave this wonderful tale 5/5 in the past, no reason to change the score.

Thank you!

Another great story. Though i have to agree with some other comments. I really do wish you would write more sequels to your amazing stories, or even longer stories. You showed us you can write long with Deep talks. Your fans want more!

My only critique is that this author doesn’t seem to like sequels or continuations to his amazing stories.

What happened when the weekend was over?

I Loved the pace of this Story .. Keep up the Great work .

Loved this story. The characters, the pace, the slow sexual build up.

Another 5 star story!

I'm not reading in sequence any longer, because I dislike anal sex stories.

Well written as usual, and I'm looking forward to more from this fine author..

What a lovely story, really liked this pair.

What a shame u code not to continue it.

Please do.

It was just about.the best story from Xarth right up to the end. I feel it was cut a little short. I need more from this pair. Please.

This is a terrific story. Masterfully done.

He got it right sticking his cock right up her as far as it would go and then shooting is cumming real deep up inside her unprotected pussy

5 Stars

6 Stars

Lisa Ann

The exact length of time this is going to remain in my cherished mental collection of stories of a similar bent. This is hands down one of my all time favorites, and I really enjoyed the ending. The parents stayed on the periphery of this story while Anna and Ryan inhabited their own little universe. It's easier to do in real life than you think. Five stars on this one, thanks for writing it.

good read

Just read this one again, got to agree with recent comments - a simple soft story with a lot of hints of complexity underneath ( whether you intended it or not! ), a great character vignette. It could have used a longer buildup perhaps, but I find that about a lot of your short works & love them anyway.

I've read this story twice now. It's truly one of my favorites.

A loving story as it should be told. A very good read into the minds of both individuals. This is the kind of story I enjoy.

I love all of your stories, but of them all, this is probably the best. Absolutely perfect.

I just loved it.

What a nice gentle story. 5 stars

I really liked this story... I know you have heard me harp on this before, but he, being the older and more responsible of the two, should be more concerned about her getting preggers. I hate that. I also know that there some folks out there that get off on the fact that pregnancy is possible, and even liking it if it happens.

Otherwise, I thought the story was excellent.

... saying "I'm so in love with you" didn't really need to be vocalized. As sister and brother, they said it, in their own way.

Too juvi...

I want to see romance in a Forever and Ever story. I didn't see it here so you missed the point author...maybe if they had said "I'm soo in love with you" then the romance part of true love could have shown...

really liked the build up huh real love, keep going.sometimes how far do you really have to go fined it.a837

The "trades" they made would be ridiculous had it not been their awareness of the end game. Despite this being the silliest of your stories, their love and affection for each other do shine through, just enough to sate readers like me.

Funny lines: “Sibling relationships were naturally flexible and unpredictable. This was an extreme case, but still nothing to worry about. Probably." Lol.

Five stars, obviously.

beautiful. The buildup, interactions and the relationship between those two was great. I hope you are alright and will come back to writing some day !

There is a corner in HELL with a lot of people who think that way, I will see you all soon....

LOL........bill

5

Reread again. Yup, still love it!

....but, nitpicks of the day...

Why would her mom care one way or the other why the damned door was closed? ....and don't people fucking knock? For all she knew he could have been in the bathroom and sis could have had the door closed jilling off. He commented about having to sneak around the house to jack off, wtf? If you cant jack off in the privacy of your own room somethings fucked up! ....hell I would wait till I knew the parents were in bed fucking, then swing the door wide open and boldly say 'why did you have the door closed?' Lol. What? You want privacy? Oooooh. Remember that next time you just barge in my room. Y'all have fun, or not seeing as how dads lost his wood now. Nite!'

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"I let myself be talked into watching a movie with the family afterward. It wouldn't allow for any privacy with my sister, but it was better than nothing."

....or you could just go up to her room and visit.

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"I got home from work on Friday to find my door unlocked."

.....well thats strange, never met a woman that left a door unlocked when she was home alone. Especially in an apartment!

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I just read the Tags.

Do you really think someone might do a story search for

in the fridge

???

her shoplifting, that he was willing to acknowledge it so easily, even wearing the watch, could be an indicator of possible problems.

where did she go when she borrowed the car?

who are her friends? his?

mom asking why the door was closed might indicate that she was aware of the attraction and a bit fearful of what might be . . . .

their ages, income, stability, maturity, and . . . .. . .

I loved the long buildup instead of the usual "I've always wanted you let's fuck" scenarios so many authors here use. I also found the ongoing verbal sparring entertaining. I hope you see fit to continuing this as a series.

The problem with saying a story was great is if you do it too much, how do you relate how you thought a story was even greater than the great ones...?

Because this one was. There's a definite difference between porn and eroticism.... and this is obviously the latter.

Without you even including any form of physical descriptions I felt closer to these two than a lot of characters in other stuff I've read.

A nicely pleasant jewel.

How da fuck do you write so good?it hits all the necessary spots.

Loved the story but would like to see a few more chapters one of my very favorite authors.I am grateful for the chance to read another of your well crafted stories.Please continue.

This story is a stupendous accomplishment! Erotic but not pornographi---which is what I keep looking for. Completely believable characters. Very literate writing style---which I love and which is quite rare on this site. I would guess that you're a professional writer who is "slumming" on literotica?

You are my favorite author on Literotica! Your stories are amazing and well written.

well, i think the best way to describe the quality of this piece of art is to tell you ,that i masturbated 3 times continuously while reading it.

Great story. Seems plausible no forced dialogue or unbelievable situations. Please continue this one. These two have only just started their story.

After reading a lot of stories I haven't found anyone that could challenge my favorite one, until I read this!

Anna has a really interesting personality.

I do however wish for more on this story. This was a perfect beginning, but they didn't fuck that much.

Also, I would like to know what caused Anna to offer the blowjob in the beginning. Was she already in love with her brother, and made up this whole game to ensnare him?

A sequel would be great, one that reveals Anna's games, and it would be sweet if she got knocked up too.

I've re-read this story multiple times, still as good as the first time I read it!

I have loved so many of your stories but I think this one is my favorite of all. I've loved reading your work so much that you've inspired me to make an account on here and take my amateur novelist skills to the erotica arena. Thanks for the inspiration!

slow, sensuous, with a steady tease.

thank you.

You have a gift for characterization and dialogue. Nothing about your characters or their dialogue seems forced or unrealistic, and I can't wait to read more!

Well written. Good tension. Good build-up. Seemingly real emotions. Erotic, for sure.

First of you stories I've read. Won't be the last.

one of my new favorites!

loved the back and forth, so common between siblings... and (maybe this sounds redundant) the intimacy that comes only from a lifetime of such closeness... great story!

Brother sister incest is truly incredible. Sister can be a better girlfriend/wife than any other girl ever could. If genetic wasn't an issue, sibling marriage would be widespread.

Great story btw. Sibling romance rocks

I love you Xar and ur amazing stories that always get me reading

Also... I am Batman.

Took me a while to get used to the writing style but after my brain adjusted I loved it. The end is smooth but leaves it open for future writing if you want to play with it, thanks for another nice story :)

I really like your writing style and the sister's characterization was unique and very appealing

In some ways she was very scary, I think the line from Rumpole of the Bailey describes her perfectly 'She who must be obeyed'. Knew someone just like her though it was my cousin who fit the bill.

Nice build up, plenty of detail but not too much. One thing you did well that others can't, you maintained a central theme without over or under developing it as well as managing to finish The story in a comfortable and reasonable way. 5/5 loved it.

damn this was good. had me wanking through the whole time. love for there to be a sequel to this. love to know what happens next.

It was a very nice & different style of story with a slow build up in both the intimacy & the boundaries crossed with a very realistic tone. Only part that was out of place somewhat was the beginning act & challenge that seemed a bit out of pace, and it would have been much better to build up to that slowly too. Great story overall!

I just read your 'Its nice to be included'. Aside being hot, it was so sweet and cute. Recently, i read a story about a guy and 6 older sisters, after a few pages i quit. So, I hope you could write a story about a guy with 5 or 6 younger sisters in your style, or in the same sense of 'Its nice to be included', an overprotective brother fiercely guarding his baby sisters, with teasings, jokes, cute and funny and at the same time hot and romantic. You're the only author I could think of of doing it. Besides, there's no story about 1 guy and 6 'younger sisters' on Literotica, just sibs, no mums and dads, uncs and aunts. You could nail it, you're my favorite author here.

Very touching and moving, you're my favorite author, more sibtales, cute and romantic. Keep it up Xarth

Somehow I picture Ryan with a healthy growth of silky black hair on his chest -- you know, something for Anna to run her fingers through, lick perhaps? -- and a healthy treasure trail and wiry pubic bush around that great cock of his that gets so much attention! If Anna is so interested sexually in Ryan, give his the sexy hairy chest and build! Write on!

Really a great story. I like the way you slowly build the relationship between them. The way it was writen was like you are there watching. Keep up the good writing and hope you continue this story with at least one more chapter. you can't leave it hanging like it is would like to know what happens with the parents and them.

sexy story-liked how these two likable characters interacted-seemed natural to me-nicely written too, thanks

I would easily put this as a 10 if there was an option. Xarth you continue to amaze me with your talents.

A superb story. Your stories keep getting better and better Xarth. I love the slow build up and the world created by the brother and sister. The sex is very well done and hot. Keep writing, more please!

Sexy story with a great buildup. Very well written.