All Comments on 'Forsaken'

I am writing to let you know that someone atleast read your story. It is one of the hardest reads that I have ever read. The fading back and forth between dream and reality made this story impossible to follow. You have a good idea for a story but it is too confused to flow. You need someone to edit this story . It needs a third party to help with the flow.

To "jdeere"....I DID the editing of this story and not understanding what it was all about doesn't entitle you to say that it's confused and such!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Yes it is a hard story to read, the language is not for the "common" mortal and you need "at least" some education and brain to read it.....BUT....it IS a DAMN GOOD story if I may say so myself and I won't stand back and let someone say otherwise.

Must be because you're too accustomed to read "simplified" and "spoonfed" stories that you weren't able to understand this story. You know some people are only meant to read "kid's books" and should leave US grownups with the "REAL" stuff. Nothing wrong with being lowly but please....don't ever condemn a story just because it's too "intelligent" for you!!!!!

LadyCibelle

jdeere: Thank you for the feedback, and you even took the time to comment, thats great, but this story is not just a 'he did this and said that', nope, this is written to make the reader think, and tease the brain a little, its not too terribly complicated, but its not just something you can breeze through and try to understand, but assured as the text continues, the self-view image evolves, becoming an overview, third person perseption is wonderful and i hope you would try to continue the line, and please contiue to comment