All Comments on 'Forward: A Quiet Beginning'

I think you need to expand the story.I liked the technical start but there wasn't enough results.To many people involved and not enough detail on individual charectors.The story was a little to short.

I do hope you take the story a little further and continue the plot.

A really great beginning. Liked the technical "cause". Take your time and expand the story. Maybe breaking it into small groups of family. A shame about the age barrier imposed here.

The only thing I disliked was the paragraph where you introduced 12, 13 people in two sentences. I can't keep any of them apart and therefore can't empathize with any of them. Please keep that in mind for the next time... It's promising though. Keep it up.

ever wonder why they have a SCI-FI area it's so idiots like you have a place to put your mutant stories try using it from now on

This is an excellent start to this story! Keep it up!