All Comments on 'Frank and Tanya'

It's a sad state of affairs when folks think they know a story better than the writer! Pathetic ! Thanks for the tale Bob, 5 stars

somewhere east of Omaha

JPB apparently doesn't know how to finish a story. Even a few additional paragraphs could do it.

Needs a proper ending.

The story up to this point is great. Now we just need an ending without which it's a 3.

I liked it. Nice job Pard.

Makings of a decent story until it ended abruptly.

Unfinished...

It was a pretty interesting story but damn man you need a continuation. Why the hell would you just stop the story before a satisfactory conclusion. If this how your stories end this the last one I read. Story could be a 5 but I gave it a 1 for being incomplete.

A great 4 star story. Would be 5 stars 🌟 if there were more of an ending. It’s fun to read just what all was done to the bastard. I’m thinking that so many Literotica stories have the same outline because most authors have read many stories here and are consciously or unconsciously fitting into the same formula.

Bill S.

Would have been more interesting if the baby turned out to be black !

A typical JPB story of justice... at least HIS version of it.

This 5-star tale DOES feel like it's Chapter 1...

...any more coming ?

Pretty good story. Hard to believe a guy would do something like that. But then I’m a guy, and if the girl was hot enough….who knows? I liked the way they dealt with the blackmailer but I thought the story ended too abruptly. There should have been more, if only to let us readers know if they made it work. Or not.

Felt like an abrupt ending, it did a 180 in terms of story direction and then ended in a very unsatisfying way. Again I have to wonder why so many of your stories are LW when they barely have any LW or don't at all.

Definitely one of your better stories

WHY DID IT END SO SOON? IT WAS JUST GETTING INTERESTING! IT COULD HAVE GONE A LOT FARTHER TO ANSWER A LOT OF RAISED QUESTIONS. WILL TANYA'S AND FRANK'S FAMILY FIND OUT THE REAL STORY ABOUT THEIR MARRAGE OF CONVIENCE? `WILL TANYA'S SISTER COME BACK INTO THE FAMILY FOLD? HOW LONG DOES PARADISE LAST WITH FRANK AND TANYA? DOES TANYA MAKE V.P.? DO MORE PICTURES SURFACE AND DOES ANYONE GO TO JAIL OR WORSE? DOES OFFICE POLITICS COME INTO PLAY CONCERNNING THE RAPISTS? SEE, MANY QUESTIONS AND POSSIBILITIES FOR A BETTER STORY.

Anyone sane would immediately run from a pregnant woman who was gangbanged, but doesn't even know if it was rape.

Especially someone who clearly valued her career above everything.

Again, damn good and orginal.

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He's a glutton for punishment and he can't pick women for shit.

He is brain dead.She refuses even to date him for eight years ,yet when she is in trouble,he helps her instead of treating her like she treated him.Also did she make VP,inherit her millions and reconnect with her sister?.

You keep on repeating the same plot over and over in multiple stories with little variation.

I do like the hint of violence, this is how my mind works and I really do not understand people that say "I wouldn't hurt this or that". I would have no problem hurting either party involved in cheating, and I would have 0 problem hurting blackmailer. And if I would end up in jail I would live my life to get out and end the life of the one who put me in. I know a lot of guys like that and that is what amazes me - how little of them show up in these LW stories.

No way would I have married that Cheating Slut . Without Trust can their be a happy Marriage ? I do not think so

Another wife, another gangbang for Bob. At least this one had a decent ending.

Two things that have been the death of many, many men. I'm thinking Tanya is a money grubbing, self loving whore. Everything is about Tanya. If it's not, then that thing is just an accessory to be used, abused and tossed aside when its served its purpose. Frank is an idiot.

At least Tanya was honest!!!

Holes in this story that it would take more time to write them all down than it probably took to write the story itself. How about just the part of the stand up comedy line about "How could you be so stupid?" My biggest problem is trying to decide which one of these two it applies to the most. The other big problem I have is there are 7 rapists out there that not one fucking thing happens to, like at least some of them won't pull something similar again. At the very least Willy deserved a broiling from the butane torch. I'd make sure he understood that if I were arrested, when I was released it would only have been Chapter 1 with more to follow.

The statement that there are no statute of limitations on rape is not necessarily true. It has a number of exceptions including on the state(s) in which it happened and the conditions under which it happened.

For me this story does not deserve the high score it received but I did enjoy the stand up comedy jokes and the part about blocking the motel room door with all of the boxes and the bed. Signed: BTW

Some decent ideas here but you don’t connect them into any plot, just random vignettes stitches together. Not much sex and that not well written; yet trying to be hot by focusing on their respective desires. Sad that you don’t respect yourself enough as a writer to give your story the chance it deserves.

I didn't have much hope for them when she made her proposition, but I like the way it ended. Nice story.

These pricks were going to learn never to do this to another woman.

First one to suffer was the bosses son. He was found in an alley with serious injuries including his genitals removed with some sort of hot torch.

The next was the nephew, 5 weeks later same thing.

Then over the next 7 months the other rapists ended up the same way. Willie was the last and when I approached him he went white and said "It was you wasn't it?".

I answered "Yes and now it is your turn."

My wife knew all about it and supported me with what I had done as she realised that she would never have real peace till they were all punished.

My wife and I eventually had 3 other children and I was a damned good father to all of my children. She eventually was promoted to VP and then to President of the company due to the founders son and nephew being shadows of themselves after I had finished with them.

The 'woman of his dreams"! Pretty sketchy way to get her. I liked how he handled the blackmailer. But in the long run, at some point, he will have to tell his son that he isn't his biological father. What then?

Reinforces why I call Just Plain Bob "The King of Variety."

I guess the devious turns of this story reflect the deviousness of JPB'S mind.

And we're the beneficiaries.

Most of the JPB stories I do not care for are because they are unfinished/unresolved. But after COMPLETING this story, the first time the thought occurred to me that it might be unfinished, was when I read the comments. I do not give 5 stars to unfinished stories.

Bob, thanx for another 5 star, well-written, entertaining, attention-holding tale that upholds your title.

Paul in Oklahoma

You know where he hunts the rest down and damages them permanently. Come on btb to the core.

Well did they live happily ever after,or did she cheat on him?

Nice touch on this story. But I think he should of lost at least one nut. Just for the fact he was in on drugging her. He has to pay a little price. Plus all the others one by one.

Decent, well written story. Too easy on Willie though. A little discreet surgery with the torch could help ensure compliance.

Pauline shows up in lots of JPB's stories and if you read enough of them you find that she finally (as far as I've read) ends up with a happy marriage. :)

Another entertaining story by JPB... common theme but he put a different twist on it.

It just makes sense in the wolrd you created. Entertaining reading but again no one to root for. The second part of the story was rushed and left a lot of storylines open without any development. Again no surprise. Another JPB classic: no ending and no real care for you story.

I think I understand him divorcing Nancy 1 He took her back after being busted cheating. Then broke her promise again getting caught cheating again!

Tanya was his dream girl from when he was little.

What I like to know is what they did to the other fucks. They may not know they are coming if they are coming. THEY ARE OUT THERE!

why would he go through the trouble of divorcing one whore ....

just to immediately marry another ....whore ...?

WTF is wrong with your male characters , and by extension , you yourself ?

Of course I would have liked it more if it had a real thought-out ending instead of a wham-bam thank you ma'am type of slapped together finish. But I suppose I'm spoiled, I'm used to stories that have a beginning, a middle, AND an end. Oh, well.

I guess if the world were perfect I wouldn't be in it.

I enjoyed this story. It reminds me of StangStar06's Whisper, the setup was superficially similar. That being said, Frank was far more secure in his relationship with Tanya than the protagonist in Whisper was, after years together. Just wanted to share that.

Could of been more....

Would have loved it if it had been more complete and the rapists had been repaid for their actions.

arranged like the days of olden feudal knights. TK U MLJ LV NV

Come on, can't anyone finish a story?

It seems that some folks just cannot stand a happy ending. Thanks for a great story Bob!

Don't leave us hanging, finish his story to get the 5

Did she make VP and then divorce him? Did he catch her cheating and divorce her? Did he get tired of being in third place behind her job and her child and divorce her? So many unanswered questions. We need a writer to take up JPB's unfinished stories and spend the next year writing endings to all Bob's unfinished stories.

so she gets gang raped bye some guys who work for the same co. as her. including family of the owner. and she just keeps quit about it. doesnt report it at all. okay a lot of rape cases go unreported, but why would she not find another job. bye still working for the same co. wouldnt she run into guys that raped her. hell what about when the owner retires doesnt she think his son will take over. just doesnt make any sense to me.

To marry a woman that never showed any interest in him over 9 years.

To marry her for her convenience.

To accept responsibility for a child that you know is not yours.

Clearly this is a long shot, possibly a self destructive act. For what? Sex with a good looking woman? Marriage with a wealthy woman? The child support payments will eat all that up. Because she said she would be a good wife?

Strange premise, a lot of lies to people they are supposed to love. It does not seem like a bright future even after the photo recovery event.

Very good ending to the bad situation. The story ended too soon. What happened with the rest of their lives?

The story had range and depth and fast pace. I felt the jokes were a pleasant excursion and they were hilarious. The characters were interesting and fun. Thanks for sharing your talent to a truly five stars story.

Or at least, the guy tried to blackmail her.

He was the father of a friend of ours and also a hideous little troll. But he had the hots for my wife and one night after a meeting, attempted to rape her. Later he told her he wanted sex from her or else he would come to me and say she instigated sex with him.

That didn't fly because she immediately came directly to me, not taking time to stop anywhere else. She consider me her rock for a reason. So I went to have a talk with him.

Okay, truthfully we didn't talk. I talked. And when I left, he knew if he contacted the police, I would eventually be back for what I left of him, which I dropped off at the emergency.

Some fuckers just have to be taught a lesson.

I guess you found another nut. Five Stars!

Thanks for the offering.

you spell the museum Hirschhorn and the picture was

http://www.hirshhorn.si.edu/search-results/?edan_search_value=plywood&edan_search_button=Search+Collection#detail=http%3A//www.hirshhorn.si.edu/search-results/search-result-details/%3Fedan_search_value%3Dhmsg_76.95

Actually, I suppose everyone is different.

I thought the "Nancy" part of the story (which is what I assume you meant as the fake major thread) was over and done with. The story started with a "surprise" indication. The story of Nancy was done in the past tense - I was waiting for the jig to be up, what was the surprise?

The bit that I thought was non-linear, disturbing to the story flow, was the Landing Strip Lounge scene. We go to present tense, we get some real dialog... but what's with all the jokes? I'm assuming JPB used them to break the dramatic tension remaining from the Nancy story... kinda like his line of pluses, the proverbial three asterisks, to indicate a change in mood and tempo.

In that case, the point of the Nancy story is to establish this guy as being a hard nosed cynic, not a romantic, not someone going to jump into a marriage with his high school crush.

Then we have the getting-to-know-each-other story, culminating with the meeting with Alex. That little two sentence scene is probably the emotional high point, and nails down the protagonists commitment to the marriage. And, it biologically wasn't his son. Now, you may think that scene is unbelievable, but then again you probably haven't raised kids.

The story from here was going to be the resolution of the residual doubts about the marriage. (there are at least a dozen stories on this theme in LW alone...) JPB, being JPB, used a gangbang and sexy threat of violence to do it. Kinda funny, if you don't take it too seriously. And really, if it were a BTB story you would have had excruciating detail of how the guy was captured and tortured.

YMMV... but look at the inches spent on each section of the story.

Now, here is the moral if you will. I mostly try to post to in some sense help... I think ya gotta give the benefit of the doubt to the author. Sure, the author might be teasing you (and JPB does this more than most... but HDK also comes to mind), but unless you have evidence otherwise, there may be a point to what he (or she) is doing.

I'll give you a story - I was walking through the Hirshorn museum in DC, when I saw a piece of plywood on the wall with a white paint streak across it. I thought to myself -

"sure, another 'art is same as found object' bullshit piece - what is it doing here?"... but I read the card next to it as I was almost past and it said under the title ("Paint on plywood", or something similar) "oil on canvas". I stopped, and went back. The bastard had painted the grain of the plywood all the way around the canvas...no frame. I just had to laugh. He got me...

Green-something

I don't care what you write on other peoples comments. I am only annoyed when you spend your comment time on MY stories talking about OTHER stories. I don't even mind if you compare my stories to other stories. But the comment should be about a) my story positive or negative, or b) entertaining me.

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While I respect greensomething quite a bit, I have to disagree with him on this point. I have defended JPB stories for 'not being complete' for a long time. Usually because he COMPLETES THE IDEA. 'Do I take the money and let her screw other people?' 'Do I divorce her or not?' (I stopped defending that practice after the big reader 'fuck you' he wrote in 'Here We Go Again.')

This story jerked around a bit too much, as Hcop said. And if I have to sift through the story to find some overarching meaning (though I believe greensomething identified the theme of this story), it generally means either I am an idiot (true) or it wasn't obvious IN the story and hence wasn't particularly well written (also probably true). And even if that is the theme 'bad marriage choices can turn good', I didn't really feel he gave us enough of a transition. We got two pages of 'engagement drama' and two pages of torture porn...but only about 5 paragraphs between the two which boiled down to 'surprise, surprise, I sort of love her now...'. Weak!

There is only so much mental work I will do on a Lit story. It isn't, after all, a book and in a short format, clarity is very important. But that is only a personal opinion...shared by a few other people. If the story works for you, great.

@FD45 I am a haunting gosts only.....................on Lit now! Ha...Ha...Ha

I have a little comparitive sense to feel some story is similar in some way to another. My opinion is only a subjective one................I know.

But DFWBeast's newer story (Hedge Fund) reminded me to Cheleywiley's two stories.....I do not want to annoy you so I do not mention wich Chilleywilley's two stories...........

Duna

While I intentionally overlooked the whole "deleted the pics from the hard drive" thing while reading the tale itself, the comments got me thinking about it. I work in IT, and I know that the ONLY software that can permanently wipe data from a hard drive is used solely by the US Military and the Alphabet agencies that make up Homeland Security: FBI, CIA, NSA, ATF, WTF (HAHA), etc. Yes, that last one was a joke. However, CCleaner, or any of the other civilian versions don't do shit that a skilled hacker can't retrieve with about thirty minutes of spare time and some data retrieval software. Like Tw0Cr0ws said, the ONLY way to get rid of data on a hard drive is to destroy the drive itself, if you don't have the MilWipe software that the Military and the Alphabets use.

But whatever. This tale was FICTION, so if JPB says the data from the hard drive in his universe is gone forever, then it's gone forever.

Only area if concern for me us the laptop hard drive.

Husband could have down load a program like CCleaner to wipe permanently any files that are deleted on the laptop.

Also the wife could have purchased a hugh horse cock strapon and raped him and videoed it !

Just a thought !

This one of the few JPB stories that I ended up pulling for both husband and wife. They weren't deep characters but didn't end up wanting one of them to be burnt at the stake either. Truly enjoyed!

Definitely not erotic enough for those who tab A meeting tab B. No we don't know if she made vice president or how many grandchildren they generated for the happy grandpartent. The only thing that really bothered me, is that, I read this story a few days ago and found that I could not remember the jokes......

to read a story where the wife does not submit to blackmail.

Well done.

It's always possible to recover deleted files, unless they kept the guy tied up overnight and ran a multipass drivewipe program on it.

And they sure are going easy on all those rapists...?

This seemed like a rather tame denouement, compared to having someone come along after the birth of the child and threaten to blow the marriage scheme out of the water with a DNA test.

marriage of convenience? this was done for centuries with few issues and contented family life.

Even today, tens of thousands in the US alone have arranged marriages yearly, through family or even getting overseas brides. they have a lower divorce rate then other marriages.

Also, and this is important, how many girls marry to "get out of their familys control", or "to have a life, family, etc of their own", etc etc. And how many of these are true love matches? Some friends have admitted they didnt really much more then like their spouses when they married, but came to love them over the years.

Yet many of my guy friends are divorces because their true loves cheated on them.

So, story is believable, and well done per authors usual high standards.

Good job

Deleting pictures?

Takes a few minutes to get them back.

The thing to do would be erase his whole hard drive, call it part of the price for being a jerk.

Even better if it belongs to the company, or has company files on it.

... and this isn't it.

"Erotica" is defined by the Oxford Dictionary of the American language, and several others, as "Literature or art intended to arouse sexual desire."

If this was intended to arouse sexual desire it must have been aimed solely at those who fantasize not of sex but of power over others - and not even sexual power at that.

Frank is bone stupid if he thinks that "deleting" a picture on a laptop does anything more than slow down the process of finding it and doing whatever one does with pornographic images. "Delete" - for the author's benefit - it's hard to believe everyone doesn't know it already - simply erases the address of the file, in this case picture, in the computer's memory. To erase the picture itself, beyond any possible reclamation, requires overwriting it. There are relatively simple ways to do it, but if Frank (i.e., the author) had been smart enough to know this he would have told us.

Does it again... Thanks.

Perhaps the story is about whether a "marriage of convenience", like the protagonists and his parents, can lead to real love?

If so, then the answer (playfully) given by the story is "yes".

Green-something

(why are the tags for this one "loving wives - wife - union"?)

... when the climax (crisis) does not match the rising action. Then you expect the real climax, but the story ends.

Lets figure something out.

When is a story complete?

In my mind, if the conflict that drives the story is resolved, the story is complete.

Not when you follow the characters for 40 years until they die.

Not when the story becomes boring because all issues are done.

Not when it strokes all of your preconceptions -

It's done when the story's defining moment is resolved.

Here, the couple got together in an odd way - not "meet cute" but meet conflicted. Bob is an odd blend of romantic and cynic in his writing - he doesn't write rose covered cottages, but every once in a while his people get together in spite of the cynical undertones of the world view. Here, the couple actually bonded over the resolution of the problem (I mention somewhere else bob and gangbangs... and creampies... and all kinds of stuff I'm happy to say I've never had experience with... and so I'm not traumatized about them.) - he trusts her from the get-go and she gets out from under the sword of Damocles (the forced gangbang) that she had been under. Earlier I commented on the fact that getting horny from the torture of the guy who tried to blackmail you is kinda kinky... but a lot of you (and I, for that matter) can feel a part of ourselves that would respond that way. Is true love when you and your partner burn the ass of anyone who would get between you? Maybe...

What else is there needed for this story? They (re)meet, get married, have a child, and defeat the bad guy(s). You want her to have another child with him? Sure, why not? You want him to go after all the other guys? Hinted at, but not done here. It would detract from the focus on the reconnection and bonding over beating the bad guy.

Seriously - give the authors here a break. They get to decide when the point is made, not the annonymice.

You want more Bob? His hard disk is full of stories, and he reposts when the hopper gets too empty. I kinda think part of his charm is that he knows when to stop beating the dead horse, sometimes.

YMMV.

Green-something

.. it is incomplete if not incoherent.

Half the story is about the peculiar marriage arrangement and the details of the agreement. And all this buildup leads to... nothing relevant. The crisis is about something else entirely, the blackmail story arc could very well happen to another couple, with a perfectly normal marriage, where someone from the wife's past, blackmails her with something that happened years ago.

Like writing half a book where you describe in detail the hero's military training in the special forces, only to have him hit by a car right after and spending the rest of his life in a wheelchair.

Love your stories but u need to get back to the wife watching/slut wife stories like 'losing it', 'aunt Maggie's mistake', 'getting to know the daughter inlaw', and 'giving willy a ride'..etc. Keep up the good work!

First of all, I see from having read all the comments that JPB has lots of fans who really enjoy his writing and have read all or most of his stories. For me, this was the first. He is a good enough writer that I may consider reading more.

Secondly, I am thoroughly in the camp of those who are good, competent writers and storytellers; who can string together complex ideas, plots, sentences and paragraphs; who proof-read before posting and who don't turn Literotica into Illiterotica.

But unless I am way off base, I suspect most of the readers on this site are here to get their lust fired up by the descriptions of sexual activities and the circumstances that surround those activities. I have seen comments on other authors' stories complain about how the bad writing of the author spoiled the eroticism of the tale. My 3* rating on this one is because JPB's GOOD writing spoiled the eroticism. Yes, it was entertaining, readable, humorous, a morality tale of sorts, and stronger than usual on character development, but the storytelling overwhelmed the eroticism. I found little in the sex descriptions that got my engine running.

As much as I love good writing on this site I don't come here to find well-written stories that happen to have some sex in them. For that I'll pick up a Dennis Lehane or James Ellroy novel. I come here to enjoy sex stories with erotic descriptions that achieve their turn-on purposes and hopefully do it in a well-written manner.

as usual, with u, the story is incomplete. though it is sorta beyond imagination, the others in involved should be presented as having been dealt with.

why do u constantly insist on unfinished tales. on second thought 4 stars,,cause u aren't a wimp cuck tale author.

Good story and I am sure it could be continued. Is Tanya expecting to carry on working with her abusers? I can't see that being a good idea. Could Nancy have asked for the same arrangement that Tanya got?

but the fattest ass of all is the anonymous moron below who calls a respected writer a supercilious jerk and a fantasist while he sits in his mum's basement and wanks his little 2 inch baby pecker

cheers you bloody nonce

Hey Bob, what's Pauline French's phone number???

the son and nephew deserve a similar visit.

the part I struggle with is her wanting to stay with, and work her way up the corporate ladder of, a company staffed by assholes like those in this story. She must know what this loving family expects of her to "make" Vice President!!!

Good read. As usual it would be nice to continue the story but alone it's still a great tale.

Half a story should only get half points....

I guess now it is up to FTDS. )))

on this one. Like all of JPB's stories I get to the end and think, "Oh damn" it's over. No JPB is not Steinbeck, but he's sure fun to read. Here I sit in my office at home busting my ass proofreading other peoples' worthless shit on line. I need a break. I go to Literotica. I find a JPB, and I'm in heaven, and then it's over. What?

Oh heck; just another five, and if he says the guy was in a comma and not a coma, and if Tanya has a promiscuosness and not a promiscuity problem...well that's OK by me.

Thanks for sharing.

and the fattest ass of all is puff the iron dragon. supercilious jerk. fantasist.

not a bad tale. Ending is better than many of JPB's stories. ****

good tale but it has a open ending. we can only guess that they stayed together.

had a kid together. we could make any ending we want.

It seemed like the end wimped out. It just felt unfinished!

But instead of "Life is like a box of chocolates", I think "Life is like a JPB tale". You never know just what you're going to get. This is a great one, for sure. Had me rolling with the comedy club jokes, and the actual plot was solid too. Great job, JPB. It even had a signature twist to it here and there. LOL

5 Solid Stars.

Why? Because when I saw JPB as the author, I got excited. You've never let me down...great story!!!!

You sad little boy.

JBP, great story, as ever, a full 5 Stars.

Good plot, no wimps, dedicated mates (dedicated to something :-D), a solid laugh or two - in all; good stuff! 5*.

Thx!

I mean, there is nobody like JPB - he can take people you think are unpleasant, and redeem them with little more than their passion for each other and for sex.

He was a burned out guy, willing to sell himself.

She was a greedy woman, willing to compromise her marriage for cash.

He is willing to tie up and torture a guy.

Seeing a guy tied up and tortured makes her horny.

And still I wanted them to win!

Good Job!

green-something

(Humm... hey - FD45 - look familiar? Just a little less extreme?)

thats it ?

As many comments pointed out this story (although can stand on it own) is crying out for new chapter.... Do they make it? Does her job inpact her marriage? Are there any other pictures. ? Does the marriage of convience get exposed accidentally? Do they get even with the 3 other rapist? does she cheat, Many avenue to take

MF90

Would have loved to read more about this couple. This ending seemed too abrupt. Thanks for the read!

Don't worry. I exercise, sleep well and eat a kitten a day (lots of Omega 666 fatty acids). My heart is fine.

Always a breezy easy read

Now that is why it is in the LOVING WIVES Section! I hope all you cuckold fetish people figure that shit out, and keep those stories in FETISH!!!! Great Story Bob! Hope you keep them coming. Thought it would be good to have sequel but you know it was a good finish regardless!

Remind me never to visit that establishment even if the jokes are funny. The clientele must consist solely of cheaters or cheatees (if there is such a word).

Great story which leaves you hoping for the best for Frank and Tanya.