All Comments on 'Gabrielle Meets a Hung Fox'

This is well written, but misses on engaging me as a reader. Can't put my finger on why. I don't feel a connection to the characters or the action. I do kind of hear bad 70's porn music in the background. Bow chica bow wow.

Please do keep writing. You are starting at a good level for a new writer. Writing gets better with practice. Practice on us.