All Comments on 'Gang Bang Club'

You are actually a very good writer. You have a nice breezy style and I'm eager to see where you go with this, but you ended this piece before anything happened. You should have at least continued this first part of your story until your character had his first sexual encounter (and I'm talking at least some penetration) at his party or even on his way to the party. A long chapter with some action is much better than a short chapter with none.