All Comments on 'Gloria's Hole'

Great story it has to be a part 2

YOu ended the story too soon. You needed to expand on it before stopping.

I really hope there is a chapter 2 and that it is about 5 times longers. Good stuff but just needs more.

teasing is not a good story,and the funny part is that you cut yourself short.it could been a good story.

A nice start, but if you're going to do a chapter story, then CLEARLY LABEL IT. I had high expectations only to see the story end before it even got started.

Sorry, but it didn't reach its potential. It had some promise, but it was not only too short, it had some glaring problems. For one thing, why did the dollar amounts at the holes change so much? Also, while some single moms might live that well, few do. Furthermore, if his mother spent all of her time working, how is it that she was also spending the same time fucking strangers at a glory hole?

It's one thing if you have a normal work schedule, but for a single mom working overtime to pay bills to at the same time have enough extra cash to pay for fancy houses, cars, and glory hole fees doesn't make sense. I don't want to be too harsh, and the story idea itself was fine, but I was disappointed in its execution.

This writer DOES have promise, however. Like my earlier work, this can be improved upon and turned into a consistent, lengthier story. Then it would do the highly erotic taboo theme justice. By the way, this is the first really tough constructive criticism I have had the grim necessity to give since becoming a Reviewer.

Sorry, but it didn't reach its potential. It had some promise, but it was not only too short, it had some glaring problems. For one thing, why did the dollar amounts at the holes change so much? Also, while some single moms might live that well, few do. Furthermore, if his mother spent all of her time working, how is it that she was also spending the same time fucking strangers at a glory hole?

It's one thing if you have a normal work schedule, but for a single mom working overtime to pay bills to at the same time have enough extra cash to pay for fancy houses, cars, and glory hole fees doesn't make sense. I don't want to be too harsh, and the story idea itself was fine, but I was disappointed in its execution.

This writer DOES have promise, however. Like my earlier work, this can be improved upon and turned into a consistent, lengthier story. Then it would do the highly erotic taboo theme justice. By the way, this is the first really tough constructive criticism I have had the grim necessity to give since becoming a Reviewer.

This story is a good foundation and there are tons of possibilities for where it could go. What a great, perverted way for a boy to lose his virginity. I would look forward to Chapters 2, 3....

Your premise, set-up, plot, whatever you wanna call it is EXCELLENT :) . It seems like you rushed it at the end though, maybe tired of writing or just wanting to get it finished to post? Whatever it is, you could make it so much better if you flesh out the ending, no pun intended. Add some more description about the atmosphere while he's getting the bj. Maybe some more description about the bj itself too.

With that said, it may be that the only thing that is missing is a PART 2! :) Please write the next part, this could be a great story once it's there in full. Thanxxx a bunch.

Someone mentioned that his mom shouldn't have the time or finances for the glory hole attending. Ummm, I think that's a big part of her "overtime work," it's not seperated from her other work as far as time or money goes. She gets paid $100 for a bj and $500 for a fuck, that CLEARLY explains why she has more money than the average single mom. Also, it says that she takes off from work at 3 pm, that explains the time factor. Why would she stay at a job when she can make twice maybe three times as much in way less time? Of course she would make the son think she was just pulling the hours at her job. So that explains why he thinks his mom is working so much overtime. Goes hand in hand. Made good sense to me and it wasn't inconsistent imho.

I think the kid is a virgin and did not know how to finish the story. What a waste of my time. Please no more half ass story writers.

The critics probably didn't notice, but the author is a young lad. He gives his age as 18-22, but that's the given category. He is probably in the 18 to 19 year old range. This young man obviously has a hot interest in motherfucking, as creative and bold young males tend to have. He should be encouraged, not denigrated. Let's have him open his mind to the idea and the infinite possibilities and pleasures of a son taking his stiff dick and shoving it right up his mother's twat. I hope and trust that he has not sworn off further contributions because of the negative comments here. There are many readers looking forward to his hot stories to come.

This was very well made and you could possibly make a sequel.

good, but to short and no real ending

This didn't even leave the ground. Nice punny name though.

long and involved story. Great idea for a story and if your purpose was to make it short you were successful but the reality is, it could have easily been a very, very story with lots of suspense and energy.....

Looking forward to what happens next.

Where's the rest of it?

make a part 2 or something it was goodbut it definetely needed alot more