by Goldeniangel
There are so many stories about more well-known myths... it's refreshing to see a new tack taken, and yours is nicely done. :)
I think it's wonderful and like the reader before I do enjoy a bit of mythology mixed in with my smut *grin*
Where I think it actually fell down is that it could be a little longer and the terminology could be a little different. You're pulling your reader into this alternate myth where you suddenly throw twentieth century terms like pussy and cock at them and it upsets the vibe a bit. I'm not offended by the words themselves, I just think they didn't go with this story. The end with their more joyful and knowing union, which was the beautiful climax of the myth, could be built up a little bit more.
Otherwise it was very enticing. Your writing style is very strong and this isn't the first of your submissions that I've enjoyed.
x. Sadie
I love Greek mythology stories, especially those of gods having affairs with women, and sometimes men. I liked your story very much. I loved reading about Apollo and that wind deity Zephyr competing for the love of a handsome boy.
Too bad the boy died. Stories like these,classical, are simply eternal. Great work ! Great genre !!!