All Comments on 'Hallowe'en Party'

Very interesting approach to telling a story. Well written and erotic. Only disappointment was when he lifter her up, she wrapped her legs around his waist, I expected her to slid down onto his member. Personally, I love doing that with petite gals. But, hey, it's your story, not mine. Wish I had the talent.

Where's the dialogue? Where's the character development. I feel as if I was reading a junior high essay. Terrible writing, just terrible. What a waste of my time.