by Miss_Amber
Many many thanks. Yes I admit editing is not my strong point. I get too impatient with myself to do it properly for short stories. My bad. Hope to be more stories up in the future.
are rapidly becoming one of my stars lassie. Superb writing, only tinily marred by little errors a good editor could easliy sort for you. Take it from one who has tried: one CANNOT edit one's own stories!
I loved this story. It has some heart to it. Like you could turn it into a love story.
I actually liked that there was no dialogue. So often dialogue in erotica becomes cheesy and contrived. The communication and chemistry comes across nicely. Well done!
Thank you all, as you may have guessed, i do not mind negative comments, just please have the balls to admit who you are.
Just write as you feel. I enjoyed your story, do write for yourself and many will enjoy.
I found it so good I didn't notice the lack of dialogue... Normally it is better with dialogue, but in this case it stood without.
I like the way you described the story & it was really good WITHOUT the dialogues. I do agree that dialogues do give a life to the characters & also to the story, but this story didn't need. I liked it, it was HOT. Thanks for the story.
I have received feedback saying this is a flat story due to the lack of dialogue. It was deleiberately written WITHOUT Dialogue. I made that as a conscious decision.
But please, if you wish to email me with disparaging comments, at least have the balls to add your email to the message so I can respond to you.