All Comments on 'His Mother His Slave'

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darkdance69darkdance69over 9 years ago

This needs more back story and explanation as to how it started. Also, less is more. Amassing a harem of characters within a short amount of time doesn't let readers get to know them and keep them apart. They tend to blur together and not be distinct individuals.

AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago
I like it

More pls

Wash2015Wash2015almost 3 years ago

I agree with dark's comments, also for being a son and this not being planned, he seems to be taking to the master and punishment role very fast. I can understand playing a part in public but taking the new girls home and then spanking /beating his mom seemingly out of the blue. Then the icing on the cake being he is now stupid rich with the land and custom house etc etc.

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