by DannyGirl31
Hi LucienLover,
I appreciate your feedback ^.^
I understand that the first chapter is a bit unoriginal. The story does get more complex with time. I'm new to Literotica and I wanted to see if it was worth posting any stories on her at all before I wrote the entire story from start to finish.
Thanks
-DannyGirl31
can I be honest?This is not very good because it doesnt sound original at all.I am not accusing you of plagiarism but maybe you can salvage this by leaving the Van Helsing wanna be story line and reaching deep down into your imagination and writing a new plotline otherwise this story will be another one of those stories on this site that people just read when they are waiting for their favourite author to update. Dont let this discourage you from writing,I only want you to become better.No harm intended
Totally different from the other stories I have read recently. Very hot and well written. Hoping you will continue.