All Comments on 'I Am NOT Your Mate, You Ass!'

I'm going to love these characters, seems like a great start to the story, just a little hard because the opening intro the characters is so short, but definitely looking forward to more of the story.

This story has potential and I can tell that your characters are going to be quite amusing. But, you seemed to rush things and your story could have been more fleshed out to make it longer. What does Fallon look like? Where does she live? What kind of house/bungalow/apartment does she live in? How close is the forest to her house? What do any of your other characters look like? I also thought that your grammar mistakes took away from your story. Get an editor or have someone you know read it over to correct it, because those mistakes really brought your story down.

I couldn't stop laughing it was hysterical!!!!!! Finally a story that isn't COMPLETELY about sex. Thank you so much.

good premise! dont let errors detract form your writing.

part, but your last line, that should be put in the last line hall of fame. I about dropped my laptop on that one.

Good story coming up. And i agree that last line....hehehe! Thats all i can say.

and I'm looking forward to the rest, and as someone else commented that last line was fantastic :)

Awesome it really catches you in and makes you want to finish it!

Great funny story, was a real fun to read. But it's in dire need of an editor and a proof-reader, the misspellings make it a bit hard to follow sometimes. I'm looking forward to the next chapters!

But as others have mentioned, it needs a number of spelling errors corrected, and work on the editing. Flesh out the opening at least a bit. It goes straight into dialogue, and is confusing. "Air go" should be corrected to "Ergo" (meaning: consequently, or therefore). That was the one that really jumped out at me. This story could be funny but you'll need to fill it out if you want to move beyond the cliche of "reluctant wilful young thing vs. alpha male" - good luck and I hope you can pull it off.

while I can agree that diving right into the intro isn't the most fantastic way to start this was a brilliant Chapter and I think the intro worked. Are there any plans to finish?

Please don't say this is it i will die if you don't finish this story it's not a nice way to treat your loyal readers mmmmmmmmmmORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

REGARDS AR

hahahaha.

I loved your story so far. Please continue.

Seems like Fallon is going to give the alpha a run for his money :) hehe. Please continue, you cant stop. This is going so well.

OMG that is hilarious just as said before flesh it out and SPELLING. the last line is the best i could not stop laughing. good luck with the next few chapters.

that was great!!!!sooo funny!you must continue MUST...pleeeaaaassse

good is it me or is it hot in here i want more and i want it now. plz, get moving i need the rest, your stories are like chocolate.

SORRY BUT THE RATING DOESN'T GO TO A TOUSAND

You have such a refreshing writing style!! To say that kept my interest to the end, would actually be an understatement!!! Toddling off to see if there are more chapters!!

I do not know if I am going to write more chapters of this short story. I thank you again for reading. Perhaps you all could tell me what you would to happen with these two alphas and I may just write that. All the best!

SMecham

write more to it please i soooo loved it!

awesome!! I simply loved it!! You have to continue pleeeeeeeeeaaaaaase!!!!

Like I said in the title more. Please write more.

Awesome start would love to read more!!!!!!! SOON PLEASE!!

This has lots of potential, and a great set up. I hope you continue.

I am liking this story. It's funny as hell and it has the perfect alpha male. Please if you don't mind I'm ready for the next chapter ;)

ever going to come back and finish it would love to know what happens even if you did leave it for a while come back and write more please....would still love more of it..

more please

Loved it can't wait for the rest! Need to put another chapter out soon!

Soooo Waiting for the next chapter! Please get more up!

This story is one of the best stories i have ever read. Please, please write another chapter!!

please continue writing about this story its a really good read.

Awsome!! this was soo funny at times plz continu would be great to see how this ends up =) did i mention this is awsome?!

I love the way this story started and I am looking forward to more of this story. I like Fallon already.

This story has so much promise. Such a shame it hasn't been continued.

NEED MOE OF A START TO THIS AND HOW ABOUT AN ENDING. LIKED WHAT THERE WAS BUT NEED MORE DATA. A STORY HAS A PLOT AND YOU START FROM BEGINNING AND FOLLOW THRU VERY IMPORTANT FOLLOW THRU.

Please write more this is a great 1st chapter I loved every bit of it the humour is great

Ilove it nd Fallon is a great charcter already!! :)*

Ilove it nd Fallon is a great charcter already!! :)*

Ilove it nd Fallon is a great charcter already!! :)*

Don't stop writing. =) I'm interested in what happens next.

please continue i cant wait to see what happens either.

you started this fabulous story and now u don't continue it's like your punishing me but i don't know why /. please continue this story

please continue the story :)

I LOVE your story and have reread it a million times over the past couple of years! Please, please, please finish it!! Or at least add onto it, the suspense is killing me!!

..and I'm giggling hysterically and half in love with you. :)

Never stop writing!

the story finish the story please

I totally love this story and I really hope you'll get back to it soon!!! :D

I've been trolling the werewolf stories all day and I finally find this one...the one i really want to read...and you posted it 3 YEARS AGO!! *cries in a corner*

5 stars... you need an editor.

Sounds like you have a great foundation. I hope you continue the story soon.

where is the next chapter. its been a real long time

more story now...please..~sad face~

More please..

I've been obsessively checking to see if you've added more to this story for longer than I care to admit...so please end the suspense and continue this amazing story!!!

This was a very cute story.

It was a great beginning. It really made me laugh. Love the last line especially. lol But really I look forward to reading more and love Fallon's sense of humor.

I like a story that can make me laugh and yours did. I'm going to chapter 2 right now since it posted today and brought your story to my attention in the first place.

I love Fallon! Great beginning and looking forward to more.

There is another story similar to this one! Only the alpha's name is grayson and I forgot the alpha bitch's name! Does anyone know the author or story's name?

I think you are talking about Following the Feeling by cricketmuse :)

The story is called Following the Feeling.

like it

I couldn't stop laughing... It was one funny comment after the other. Love it already and can't wait to read the next chapters. Still can't stop laughing...

This girl is my spirit animal lol 😂😂😂😂