by Joe Wordsworth
have to agree to the below, this didnt even catch my attention enough to bother finishing the first page. lame storyline and bleak descriptions. spice it up a bit its not like you need to be shy on here!
Really good, I'm really interested to see what happens next. Please make fifth chapter!!
This is a great story -you've built up the characters personalities really well and the dialogue is fresh and realistic. I crossed my legs at the whipping bit and I don't even have dangly bits!
I really don't know how to put into words just how funny these stories are to me! I went through high school in that wonderful position of being the nerdy little guy that could only look at the cheerleaders and drool, (you really nailed all those wonderful little wandering thoughts by the way) and it was great to read stories about someone else dealing with it. Thanks so much. Keep writing!
Personally, I thought your story was fantastic, but I did not really understand the ending...perhaps it's because I had my erection in my hand, and I was so close to climax...hey, this story really mirrors real life!