All Comments on 'Intertwined Fates 30: Coronation'

wait noooo why is it overr???

I read this all through last night and tonite. I could not stop reading. A very awesome story, very well written. I am now going to read all your other work. Thank you so much for sharing your talent with us. A sequel would be awesome.

Kate - aka mikothebaby@yahoo.com

You wrote a very good story. I read it all the way through before I left a comment. It was well worth the time and reading. I know that Loy and Carl are king and queen now, but what is going to happen to their frinds.

Nice idea but a bit sparse on character development for my taste. I noticed that, every time there was a disagreement, there was never really an argument. One person always just went 'OK.'

In addition, it would be helpful to work on your grammar and sentence structure. For example, it's you're (you are) not your and than not then. An editor would likely improve your writing.