by LuckySon
un like some of the other comments i found your story very erootic, I keep re-rading it many thanks
To the readers who sent feedbacks about my stories: my provider filtered the emails from Literotica as spam and deleted them. I've fixed the problem: could you write me again? I'd like to know what do you think about the stories.
In my opinion this was posted too early in the story. The story needs more content and someone cumming to make even a chapter worthwhile. I like where this seems to be going but this wouldn't get anyone off.
First part was promissing, but second was disapointed to me. Too little imagination, and too simple story.
Is the dragging out of this story supposed to be fun?........chapter after chapter when you could tell a story in several parts long enough to be interesting.
This has too much build up and not enough action.
Im bored to death waiting for the next part or something good to happen.
Give up now and save us all the torture of reading this rubbish.