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by anasands

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 17 years ago
You need an editor badly and FAST!!!

I like the concept of your story but it was hard to read with wrong usage of tenses. Get a decent ed fast if you intend to continue with the story.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 17 years ago
Could have been good!

Just got back from Egypt...so I have all the legends fresh in my mind! This story could have been great, except, its disjointed! Work on the flow and yes, get a good editor!

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