All Comments on 'Jamie's Grate Change'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
some potential

I like the story-line. The writer needs to proof-read and fix some technical problems. The first person mentioned is Jake, but the story is about Jamie - what happened here? Almost the entire story is written third person, but in the third paragraph, it is suddenly first person for a sentence. Overall - a promising start.

EspressoBolusEspressoBolusover 16 years ago
Grate change?

Where is the fire place?

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