All Comments on 'Jennifer's Innocence'

Nice start! Can't wait to read the rest!

A start no doubt but hate to say the hubby may want to watch her fuck others as a progression.

A very nice build up. Can't wait to read about the progression in Jen's sexual awakening.

Can't wait until he asks me to fuck her!

Loved the start. But you didmt get to far. I was just starting to love the picture yoi were painting and bammm. You were done. Come on jen. Wear the red one

This was not even long enough to be a tease. You just stopped in the middle of things. Cliff hangers only work if there is a cliff. None here. Expand the plot and the story: characters? conflict? what actually you intend with this story. Look at other multi-chapter stories and see how they plotted them and developed their characters beyond the physical descriptions.

Don't wait forever on part two and don't listen to anyone... Take it wherever YOU want to

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Keep going!

5????????? wtf????5???????5?????-dumbfuck....

It's a great start for what it is, but it isn't a complete story yet. Keep going.

What a perculiar place to leave a story, not too sure now as to if i'll bother reading the next bit in case you stop again at a crucial point. It looked as though it was going to be good as well.

his cornhole reamed, he smoked the fattest cock, betrayed!

Less can be more but not in this case. Great storyline but submit at least one entire page or you end up frustrating, not pleasing most readers. 2.5 out of 5 stars.

Another husband wants a hot sexy wife to show off her body and maybe fuck other people all so the husband can apparently have better sex with her. Good luck with that tried and tested way of spiceing up your marriage. And all this after only 2 years of marriage, most couples try sharing and swinging a bit later than 2 years. Is there really such a thing as an innocent 'woman' these days? Even catholic woman know how to fuck and please thier men and to find an ex catholic schoolgirl who is a virgin? What planet are you from?

However, you need to develop Jennifer more, right now she seems to be empty headed. Readers want to know what she is thinking and why she is doing this. Plus 1 page per release is not enough to catch the readers eye and mind, shot for 2 to 3 pages per. And finish the story..