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All Comments on 'Kelly's Story. Plan Put Into Motion'

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almost_wildalmost_wildover 12 years ago

Great start, can't wait to read more :D

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Good start but...

Interesting. Looking forward to where you are taking this. Could do with getting a editor though.

ajridlonajridlonover 12 years ago

Can't wait to read more. Has definite possibilities. Agree that could use a little editing.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
get an editor

the story itself has possibilities, but please go to the volunteer editor page and get some help. This was basically unreadable.

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