All Comments on 'La Playa Ch. 01'

Very interesting story, and a quite new spin which I personally liked. I think you set a great scene which to build on and I'd like to see how you will take it further.

I have never read a worse story. One page bragging about how rich And Great he is And going on and on about rules. If I had been there, I would have left the Resort After 5 minutes.

It's obvious this is the start of a series--a series that certainly parallels a number of fantasies. It needs to be set up, explained, and started. This "chapter" did that. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of them.

A multi-chapter story that I'm looking forward to reading! As for the anonymous reader who didn't like the background and attention to 'rules,' I disagree as it helps to set the stage for what I hope is a hot multi-part story. Based on that potential, it's a '5 Star' for me. Looking forward to chapter two.