All Comments on 'Lakeside Ch. 01'

I only read the first two paragraphs before giving up.

Here are just SOME of the problems I noticed:

"unusual for as I don't care for the rain."

> I think the "for" should not be there.

"The small waves brushing the shoreline n the morning breeze."

> Even assuming the "n" is supposed to be "in", this is not a complete sentence.

"...and see lovely woman sitting on rock looking out over the lake."

?> Unless written by Tarzan or Tonto, this should be ..."A lovely woman sitting on A rock...")

...and several more.

Man and woman meet in the woods and have foreplay...ZZZZZZZ