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NOW. Keep up the story.

Now that you have gotten rid of the ampersands, there is one other mistake you keep making. See if you recognise it: "I want to taste you honey, why you suck my cock." You frequently made this mistake in chapter one. You keep using the word 'why' when you should be using the word 'while', they are not interchangeable. In the example I have cited, it should read: "I want to taste you honey, while you ..." See the difference? I know someone will complain about my pointing this out, but I am just offering constructive advice to help you improve. Otherwise, you have to continue this story.

Thanks for the tip again anonymous. I don't find it annoying, I do in fact find it helpful.

I know the why/while rule you brought up, so I don't know what happened.

But again thanks. I'll keep an eye on that.