by drcox10
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This kind of writing sucks. Do it in 1st or 3rd person. Ok, you?
I appreciate the feedback! I do recognize that 2nd person is usually a no no, but I really liked it in this story. For me, it played on the father's denial; it created space between himself and acknowledging himself in those acts. I do understand and appreciate some will see it as an epic fail, but I promise it isn't a habit i will use often.
I have no problem reading a second person story, so I don't see what all the fuss is about. I liked the plot, as well as the slow buildup- something else i prefer. Thank you, for a good read.
besides the poor choice of second person mode for telling the story . . what was this story supposed to be about . . the title "Lil Girl" implies it is going to be about "Daddy/lil girl" . . a delightful D/s variant (which I have enjoyed both online and r/t) . . or was it supposed to be an incest story ? . . you start it off making it sounds like the girl had to sneak off (run away?) to see her own dad, like she is a minor . . . . . . this story more looks like it was just intended to be a short little stroke story that an attempt at a plot was added as an afterthought . . . .