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AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
Constructive critism

Vague characters. Too much dialog, surroundings and charcters not detailed enough. I have no idea what they look like, much less where they are, and I have read 4 chapters. It´s not bad, but it needs tweaking.

Keep writing.

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