by JakeRivers
Or maybe it went RIGHT heh
Nice work and a great premise -
the historical setting was important to make it work so smoothly - it does not even require a suspension of belief being placed in the late 40's - good idea -
This is different and difficult to write, I'm sure.. But, no matter what, the love is great!
I don’t know about the incest being ok or not as this story is laid out by this great to the point piece. Is this incest a natural effect of being really isolated from the world? I do know I really liked the story. It moved me and left me wondering if this behavior was damaging or knowledge of no societal pressure to belie real pain.<p>You did a great job of writing and making me read it twice. It did so engross my thoughts of how people survive outside a societal conception.<p>Please give us more of these well done differing story lines. Thank you for the entertainment and dilemmas of our prejudices.<p>PT
Sometimes stripping things down can add depth. Well done.
Very nicely done. Good change of pace for you. As always I can tell you did your research. Good Job!!!
Your friend
with the highest regards
DG Hear
I don't know if anyone ever accused you of that or not, but predictable is not something I assocoate with you. This is a really good story of survival during the depression. The kids did what they had to to get by and they came out just fine. Well done!
A short story which encompasses two entire lives without an extraneous word. Very, very well done.
What a beautiful and heart warming story Jake, it brought tears to the eyes of this old codger! Such a gem of a tale – perfect in fact. Any suggestions for improvement would be an insult. Heartfelt thanks1 Pete.