All Comments on 'Loving Stepdaughter Ch. 04'

masochist - i hate bad spelling

In your writing you tell too much and show too little. Get down to those specific feelings and reactions of the human body. Don't just say, he was fucking so-and-so; tell us what they felt like—cunt, nipple, clit, cock—in a way that turns the reader on. You write pretty well (a real compliment on LE) and your readers need to feel empathy for the characters, instead of just being told, "Jane fucked JIm. She liked it."

Go wild, and bring us with you.

Jane in Pasadena