All Comments on 'Lusts of the Flesh'

This is a very provocative story, both erotically and politically. It is successfully erotic, but its challenge to conventional Christian church might incite some righteous indignation. I guiltily enjoyed the narrative of temptation.

The writing is exceptionally well done, in narrative and technical aspects. The spelling appears to be British, rather than Yankee. But the story could still benefit with a brush with a grammar/spell checker, needing a few "?" marks rather than periods. And 'wrapt' should be 'rapt' as in 'rapture.' Keep writing, Jaymal! We enjoyed your work!

We need more stories of females seducing or dominating males. hehe

Rhianna and Haley were hot and they owned Danny boy hehe

Jaymal, You've nailed the struggle between a genuine evangelical Christian faith and the lusts of the flesh. I've experienced it and don't yet have all the answers. My one poem submitted to Lit ("Why Did God?") is a gut-wrenching self-reflection on this issue. I recently submitted my 7th Lit story ("The Catholic Lifeguard's Baptism") which takes a cheekier look at it. Kudos on your sincere exploration of this issue. Thanks, AverageBear in Canada

more please!

so good, I love the lightness at the end. Hailey rocks :)

Sure, it's a fantasy, and the sex was hot and all, but these girls are serial rapists! It was the end of his career anyway, he should have had these sluts arrested on multiple counts (they admitted to doing this to other pastors) of kidnapping and rape.

Just because it's girl-on-boy doesn't mean it's not a criminal act.

Interesting to see the power dynamic flipped so that the girls were in control. As for the jail comment: It's a fictional story. Many fictional characters do things that would land real people in jail. Sometimes they are very... entertaining... to read about.

Great read keep them coming

RAAAAPE!

That was also brilliant Jake. Thanks very much. Wish I'd been the vicar.

AMAZING!

ROTFLMAO! A brilliant tale on every level! So very well written and every aspect was a joy to read! Great work!

Awesome story. Thanks.

This is my favourite Jaymal of all time. The juxtaposition of religion and sex, restraint and licentiousness, humour and filth, is brilliant. And it captures just what it is like when one is poised on that uncomfortable cliff-edge between holiness and sin. I relate to that feeling!

why jaymal why?

why are you so double standard when it comes to pain inflicted on gender?

why is it ok for your male chatacter joe to mercilessly tear mary janes virgin asshole in just one hard stroke joe didnt even gave her the time to adjust and mocked her for getting wet and orgasm

but when it comes to danny how conviniently you saved danny from getting a big dildo in his ass just in one stroke and having anal orgasm like just mary jane and both the girls mocking him just like joe

you are emitting a truck full load of toxic masculanity jaymal

danny here being a guy faced no pain at all but mary jane faced so much pain despite being a really sweet gentle nice guy ?

had i been there i would have thrust the dildo w/o lube into sweet little tender asshole of danny just to give him the same pain mary jane faced during hard and brutal fucking of her virgin ass

if its right for joe to destroy msry jane asshole and laugh at her pain

so why is it wrong for rhianna or haley to destroy dannys ass

according to you jaymal its ok to abuse women asshole brutally but not men's?

jaymal,is you masculanity so weak that taking a cock in your rectum or any of your male characters makes you less of a man?

for you painful sodomy of women is enjoyable and painful sodomy of men not?

coz i like both men and women to get brutally sodomised

i would have sodomised all of your male characters in the same way they sodomised naive virgin women like mary jane

very weak and pathetic femdom by rihanna

it seems like this is written for lazy male audience who like to lie down in bed and let woman do all the work

it ended up in him getting more pleasure than pain which sucks

what challenges christianity is men getting sodomised and end up loving it and the not the women ?women being sodomised is boring af

its so tantalising when a cock is forced upon a mans rectum all his boasting comes to a pathelic mewling of a gangraped women?

the shame the humiliation man faces when he gets taken by cock up his ass ,his submission is like the mount everest in front of the trashy and weak dominatio done by rihanna on danny ?

once a man gets sodomised he breaks so bad do bad that a chick gets gangraped by 100 guys gor the 100th time

but jaymal doesnt have guts to show his male character subjected to a heavy domination enough to make him a sissy to a dominatrix

most of his story involve severe mindfuck and breaking of women at the hands of plain braindead male bullys

but never jaymal would challenge to break a man to a sissy at a poweful womans hands