All Comments on 'Lynn and Leif Forevermore Ch. 21'

Not best choice of words. But keep updating. 5 Stars.

First of all, I must say I am really enjoying this story. It's well written and if you close your eyes you can almost see them together. The descriptions are excellent. BUT... 21 chapters and now he's chickening out? Come on, already.

I like the story line. I wish I loved it though. 21 chapters and still no sex? Hmm... It's getting tedious. Also, please use a thesaurus. "Sweet", "little", "light black", and "nasty" are grossly overused to the point of seriously detracting from your work.

Like the story overly fluffy tho