by paopao33
I like this story. The all dialogue format seems to work in this story very nicely. I like the characters and the imminent conflict both I the matches and between the competitors.
Grammar and syntax errors are distracting.
I am glad that you liked it. I had been searching this kind of story/experience for a long time. I feel vulnerable people who does not take care of themselves in the environment that my story has, should be subject to punishment or something like that. It has been one of the greatest fantasies for a long time!