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Click here"You are doing it again, Maijien," said Aejoa, not moving his eyes from his text-viewer.
"My apologies, Aejoa. I guess controlling that urge is harder than I thought," she said with an apologetic smile. "I'll go take a walk in the garden, to gain control of it."
"Thank you," said Aejoa again.
Over the next months, as Aejoa adjusted to living with the one he loved as if she was just a good friend, the two forgot their conversation about secrets. Majgen grew accustomed to keeping the secret, and Aejoa forgot she had a secret to tell him.
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Copyright of Nanna Marker (lit ID ellynei)
Not being as eloquent as other people offering feedback I trust that great story, well written, really interesting concepts, read your story straight through and really loved it offer you something for so freely sharing what you have written
To those who want to bitch about the story being unfinished, especially if you already no many longer stories on literotica are unfinished, if you think about it there are a number of ways you can verify if a story is complete before you begin reading. Then don’t start reading!
To those who bitch about a very few spelling mistakes it inconsistencies get over yourselves, the story is free. The author never intended to offend you personally. There are ways of giving constructive critique e.g. reward the author with balanced feedback
This was my second read of this story and it is so good I will come back and read it again, if I can’t by a completed version
Ellynei do have you thought about updating your bio?
Thanks for sharing and I wish all the very best
Regards CRW
I too knew that it was unfinished but I will live with the wonderful experience and marvel at the imagination and heart you have put into this work. You took me dragging and screaming threw the Moth story. Even though you warned of the incompleteness of and more you told us not to read this story, I flew thru this wonderful story wanting it all and fearing the end as it rushed toward me at inhuman speeds. I cherish the heart ache.
This will be added to my go back and read and read again.
Please take care and find and keep love.
Richard
wish i was an empath and you could show me the path of the heart. being human and alone in your mind can be a bitch and i think we could heal each other as friends
what an odd (?) imagination to come up with this story. And I read it straight thru! Scotty
Being a husband of an English Major (MA) I have a tendency to, on occasion, critique stories and would like to say you are doing a great job, both in syntax, grammar and structure. While there is a small area of improvement, it is not significant enough to necessitate any changes at this time. Incidentally, I have only seen about a dozen spelling error in this entire story to date and the relaxed style of you writing seems to garner considerable amount of imagination in the story and where it is headed.
Heartfelt congratulations to your endeavors.
Not knowing anything you or your life since you wrote this fantastic story. All I can say is you are a great writer, and I hope you are well. Enjoyed it very much even knowing going in there was not an ending. THANK YOU
I knew going in that it was not completed and started it anyway. Fantastic work!
I understood the risks of falling in love with a story with no promised ending. It was worth it.
You are brilliant at basic world building using meticulous details of the biological and anthropological differences between species and worlds. You are brilliant at exploring character and motivation, especially Majgen's. The Path of the Heart has swiftly become one of my favorite fictional faiths. Whatever you are able to do with this story - or even if you do nothing with it at all - you've already achieved so much. I see/love this story, and it is beautiful.
I could never delve into the reasons why this story is so good. Nothing I could ever write would convey those reasons properly.
I thoroughly enjoyed the story of Majgen. I wonder if it has been published yet? I will be searching for it.