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by nevyn11

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 15 years ago
needs work

kinda confusing. errors in punctuation, grammar, & spelling jolts me out of the story & make it hard to follow & understand in some places. get someone to edit & proofread for you, & this could be better. good luck.

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