by beshakis999
Please continue. The helplessness of her is like some little prey being played with.
You go into WAY too much detail setting up this guy's plot. It's ostensibly a sex story, but three-quarters of it is dull set-up. Get to the point. Or if you're going to take that long to get to the sex, the sex better be spectacular.
That guy is an idiot. A good plot setting makes the story work, especially for part 1 of a series. Future installments will allow you to skip a little more into and move right into the sex.
Wonderful story and all the detail leading in made it feel more real and belivable.
Damn the critics! Great story!
xoxo
Lucia