All Comments on 'Margaritas and Masturbation'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Cute

I enjoyed this, it was cute and reasonably well written. Good luck in the contest!

PrincessErinPrincessErinover 14 years ago
Good

If nothing else I love the title of your story.

srlmortsrlmortover 14 years ago
Nice

The concept of the story is fabulous however you use the word "she" way too much. Consider using other words in front like: Quickly, she inserted two cubes inside or something like that. The she's are way too distracting. Once I got passed that it's a great idea.

Good Job!

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