All Comments on 'Mastering Bella Ch. 03'

i love the way Bella is falling into her submission and please keep the good work up

Please write more chapters; you're talented.

This is a great story. Building in a really nice way, and definitely HOT! I look forward to more chapters.

Always in storytelling you have to give the reader a level playing field, don't tip to quickly.

Think of yourself as a waitress bringing the reader drinks on a tray. YOU might have exactly what they want in the story but if you rush and spill their drink it was wasted effort. This one took it just a step too fast.

Mel, stepped it up too fast for the comfort level of the story on the whole. And, from the emotional distress of ellie, for his "slave" Not good.

Still enjoyable. But not acceptable.

Walks into Mel's office with a baseball bat. "Oh, don't mind me just going to do some redecorating. He seems to like red in the office. I can help with that."

Shoo, shoo, nothing to see here, back to writing.

MST

Loving this ellie, now I know where the image in your profile came from, it is very sweet .

Very good