by xelliebabex
A good chapter wonderfully detailing the progression of their relationship, no wonder poor Bella is confused....so much to take in in such a short time! As I said in my comment on a previous chapter I like the insight into how Mel is thinking and who is a slave to who? Hmmm. Thank you for posting another chapter, keep up the good work, it makes my day!
i am really enjoying this story and hope that you will continue it. i look forward to seeing how they will act around her parents and the turmoil in her mind as she is there. Please write more, thank you.
I love this storyline. Great portrayals of emotions and need. Please keep going.
There seems to be a plot hole. You never mention birth conrtol. She seems the type ofgirl who is timid and would have used condoms with her old boyfriend. Evn if he doesn't come inside her, there is still a pretty high risk of pregnancy.
This is what I was expecting, and hoping for. Bella is expressing her emotions and conflict. She is reinforcing the fact that she is human and will have a natural reaction to the sudden extreme changes in her life. I love how Mel is constantly calling her his own. It is comforting and kinky at the same time. It is protective and threatening, dominant and affectionate. Well done. I still think you should consider an editor for miscellaneous writing errors, run-ons, typos and such. But well done!