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CreamerCreamerabout 16 years ago
Nicely done

My biggest critique is the ending -- take a little more time to wrap things up, I think. Other than that, a little more characterization would be good, as it adds an element of motivation that keeps the story moving.

But nicely done, well-written, and hot in a spanky kind of way!

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