All Comments on 'Mother and I'

Significant editing is warranted

I would suggest having someone proof read your paper as well as using spell check. The lousy spelling takes away from the story. Good luck in the future.

Well, this was total crap.

I did a better job on the day I lost my virginity than you did on this what you may want to call a story, I call it crap!

The story has it's good points even though it's rough to read.As with any first time poster, I think the author will improve by the way of experence. Good feedback and an editor, is what this author needs, not cheap shots at his work. Thanks

"I messaged her breasts"!!

Wow, tits that can receive texts, what a concept :)

I didn't go past this and based on other comments if would haqve been a big waste of time.

this story sucked i couldn't read past the first line give up writing

I'd love to tell you how great this story was.

I'd like to say how turned on I was.

Instead I'll just use one word

CRAP !

English apart (obviously not the author's mother language) and some lack of writing technique the story is erotic and lively. I am not a fan of non consentant sex but I've read much worse stories in this site.

Some of the comments here just reveal the difficulty (or non willingness) of accepting a foreign culture or in a word - chauvinism.