All Comments on 'M's Desires'

Hey! I really like the plot and the story for the most part. It kept my attention. One suggestion that will really help: be consistent with how you address the audience. Is the audience "you" or are they reading this story as a third person. Sometimes you refer to the female character as "you" and sometimes as her.

Don't let bad comments stop you. There are some of us out here who like love in our master/LOVEslave relationship.