by foxylady1954
on some sort of plot and characterization for your next chapter if you wish to write a story because where it is now its not even close.
honey, tease the brain first in erotic prose it leads to nether regions.
The way you depicted lesbian sex was extremly good and very sexually arousing and stimulating I really give you more tham 75 points I would say mayby a 95 rating but definantly you deserve much more than a 75 rating In fact you were so close to a 100 that I started to rate a 100 because your story was one of the best I have read maby not the best of all the stories I read but definantly it is close to a 100 I really loved it it really turned me on big time and i really did enjoy masterbing to this stor